by internetwanderer
Apparently written by an author for whom ESL. I’m no grammarian but can safely. Say the author desperately needs an editor.
Third person singular...
Other than that and the slightly far-fetched storyline, I must say I like it. Tafts description in stark contrast to hers is a strong image that does a lot for me. The author knows a lot of words, not all befitting (rutting behemoth?) but with practise....