by JDDebaum
Share the plot vision more, I think you have a good story going but reveal more where you are headed with easier, smoother, more engaging words. I am interested in seeing how you develop this story.
Good story that could use some polish.
This has the possibility of a continuation story.
Like reading the westerners of the 50's. Must use your imagination to see it. Would like a sequel. Made me feel young again.
In my mind, I was seein' hit in black n' white. I'd be right proud to see a passle more episodes just as soon as ya kin git'em writ.
Both Winding Creek and Willow Creek in the story. Is that an error or are there two places with similar names?