by DesireableLust
Keep writing, I am interested in seeing where this story line goes... :)
well if he's an Alpha he should be able to kick Donovan's butt.
Love the story. Can't wait to see where it goes. But if I could make a request....could u make the chapters a little longer?
It is 2.30 in the morning and couldn't resist reading this chapter and must say it was worth the lack of sleep! Wonderful chapter and looking forward to the next! Ok I am of the bed to dream of sexy wolves while hubby snores.lol
Excellent chapter. Hope you don't drag out Keenan's kicking of Donovan's ass because even though he only got a quick mention I don't like him at all! Be as quick as you can with the next chapter!
How insecure is his old Alpha to send someone to bump him off. Donavan the creep has no hope against him. Maybe he will let Donavan live so he can deliver a message to Eric the weak to keep his wolves away from him or else!
I want more. This story is very good and i wish you'd make it a bit longer
grammar issues, but considering you are your own editor that's not bad at all.
Great story and I am eagerly awaiting more :D
I love your story so far, it definitely makes me squeeze my legs together! And I also like the little bits of background, its just enough to catch my attention, but not too much to bore me :D please write more, I'm dying to know what happens on their date
This part, "at heart then Eric," should be "at heart than Eric" . This story's gonna be good. Great build up :D
-ivybabe
So an enforcer beta is coming after a strong alpha? I'm sure that will end well for him.
Sorry, earl grey tea is the only tea I like milk in xD
No one said the enforcer was going to fight fair ;P
More more more, some of us don't care about earl grey tea. Just keep writing.
So great at writing to trap your reader so quickly in a face pace story. I like it and enjoy the little drama that is to come.
i enjoy what you have so far and i wonder if there is more to why eric wants keenan dead, why didn't he except that keenan left the pack to be on his own. and i can't wait to see where this date takes mia and keenan
Please please PLEASE make the next submission longer. This one page thing is KILLING ME! Does every one who posts on here sudden;y have writers block after writing one page or is that becoming the norm? What happened to the 3-6 page entries. Don't get me wrong, I love where you're going with this story and I want to read more of it. But the one page at a time thing is grating on my already frazzled nerves.
Great work,loved reading it,,,but longer chapters would be very nice.Look forward to more writing from you..
Parts seem a bit rushed though. I'd like to know more about the characters.
the story is a little rushed not much character interaction or development before the intimacy, but I look forward to more. Best of luck
I love where the story is going. Longer chapters would be nice. Hurry and post chapter 3.
Just a wee thing, a rogue wolf is a problem, whereas a rouge wolf would just be funny...
I really like the idea and basis of this story. Don't worry about the nay sayers, just write your own story.
I am enjoying that your wolf is not rouge but still simply trying to sort out where he should be...I'm waiting to find out how the romance and pack politics work out...Keep up the good work :)
Keep the chapters coming! Seems like a very good start, and I like your writing style.
Please hurry with the next chapter, I am in love with your story. I can't wait to read about what happens next. I check almost everyday to see if the next chapter is up, so hurry hurry... the waiting is killing me!
I've been waiting patiently, but I'm starting to get tense now. I really want to see more of these two. I'm loving it, and Moose too! :-) Love dogs and I liked that Keenan recognized and respected Moose standing his ground trying to protect his mistress, even though he clearly knows what he's dealing with. Go Moose!! No mean wolves better mess with him or I'll be furious. Please continue soon.
please don't stop writing. i enjoy this story and can't wait to read more
I'm loving this and I can't wait for more! I really hope you're going to continue this :)
Damn it!!! Why do half the good stories have to be partially finished? Next chapter please.
next chapter pls....? =)
very much interested to know what will happen next.. thanks!
To wait for next chapter or to delete? That is the question.
I really encourage you to not abandon this story. It's really promising!
I am completely in love with this story, I absolutely love the characters and I am dying to know what happens next, I am begging you to please keep writing. I HAVE to know what happens next!!!!
I am loving it so far and i eagerly dying for more and so i do hope that you will post more--lots more and soon!!! i am loving their cemestry so far and Damion (right?) i wonder what is going to happen and it is driving me crazy! so don't forget us and please post another chapter soon, with lots more to follow---PLEASE!!!! :)
I love this story! Your attention to detail is magnificent! I appreciate all of what you're writing! Please write more chapters! It's beautiful.
I can't help but wonder why it seems like nearly every female character I read about (note: NEARLY every) -- seems to have these giant breasts. Seriously, people, do you know how much those hurt? One of the women I know has DD breasts, and she's almost constantly dealing with shoulder pain, back pain, and neck pain.
They don't hang there, defying gravity. SOMEthing has to hold them up. And that something gets sore. Fast. And it's not sore in a good way.
As a woman with DD breasts myself, I do understand however, back pain caused by having large breasts is not exactly the whole problem. Both myself (DD) and my mother (DDD) have never had back pain from our breasts before because we have strong back muscles and stable core muscles. If you do exercises to strengthen your core it really has a huge effect on your posture and makes your body able to support breasts that large. Plus bras play a very important role. Many women don't wear bras that offer enough support and some can't even afford the types of bras they should be wearing.
Personally I chose to write Mia this way because its what I'm familiar with and in my mind larger breasts is a characteristic that helps better represent a voluptuous woman which I wanted Mia to be. I know this doesn't please everyone, but its important to remember that this is fiction. Porn is nothing like sex in real life. Men from romance novels are nothing like men in real life. That's the beauty of fiction, you can write what you want without having to address the realistic problems of it. I'm sorry if this upsets you, but this is how I like my character.
I have DD and have no back pain! While there are other issues w/ having large breasts that isn't one of them. It most likely depends on a persons build. I am tall and curvy and make sure I wear supportive bras when needed. It probably helps that I played sports and remained fairly active. Those I know of who had pain were out of shape and much larger than DD.
I am loving the story thus far!
Not all breasts are shaped or even hang the same there are some women with breasts as big as mine (36 ddd/e) and are quite perky. Also I've never experienced any back pain due to their size, yes I agree these things are heavy and for me I like to have great support but it's possible to carry the load without discomfort.
Sounds to me like the person with the pain may have other pain issues than with support for her boobs, or maybe she very petite?. Coming from a family of large breasted women, being a DD myself and having plenty of women friends in the same category. The only thing to complain about is the bra strap cutting into your shoulder good thing they came up with wider straps. Perhaps she is down playing her cup size and is actually into an E or G size.
Oh come on all the comments are I have perky did breast SMH thanks for bragging and making us less fortunate feel ashamed
While I don't think the comments about our well endowed readers were intended to alienate anyone, I can see how so many chimimg in could seem a bit eye opening. Thing is, given the fact that a lot of us are wearing an improper fitting bra (be it through the band, cup, or both) there are more of us who are fuller than we think. *side note, LB fitters are not as great as they claim for the money you pay for such a poor variety. But that's another forum and I ain't one to gossip so you ain't heard it from me...*
I think the main point of the comments was that most of us fuller topped ladies don't experience back pain directly or solely related to breast size, contrary to the popular notion.
While I'm here and we're talking, I'll be mother and say don't forget to check up on your girls at least once a month ladies.
OK, I do like your story but the grammatical errors are too becoming too distracting. You do need an editor.
There are OTHER sizes, why do ALL writers on this site white DD breasts? 1*