All Comments on 'With Strings Attached Ch. 16'

Thanks for bringing back Vicky, and Holly was a great surprise.

Please keep going.

More absurd with every word you write.

and here I was worried that you wouldn't update for another two years

This chapter doesn't move the story far. The Janet parts were boring. Alice is doing lesbian acts too easily.

I'm always glad to see more chapters in this story. Can't wait to see more.

Let me start this by saying, I absolutely adore your story! The number of times I've cycled through them, and it's gotten me all hot and bothered has been amazing! I think another comment might have mentioned this, so I hate to echo, but the current direction is leaving a tad to be desired. I think the entire premise of a shy, wallflower, totally inexperienced virgin that was forced into a lesbian relationship sounded so fabulous, and it has been! But.....I think our little Alice has gotten basically to comfortable. She's actually responding as a lesbian, and I think that direction is what has some people less than satisfied. I think the appeal was the fact that Alice almost seems to be enjoying herself now is where our consternation lies. I'm actually not sure where else Nicole could push Alice's boundaries. What if....and bear with me here....Nicole actually pushed Alice to be with a man, and she didn't like it!? The idea that Nicole actually warped her sexuality towards being a lesbian would probably be devastating to Alice, and could open up new doors, possibilities, etc. Although Alice having to make out or pleasure her mother also sounds delicious! Apologies for the long diatribe, but I think most writers don't mind constructive criticism, not just, "I don't like where this is going", without providing any actual suggestions. Although honestly, I can't imagine myself not keeping reading, so I look forward to the next chapter! Hopefully my comments aren't upsetting, just my two cents!

Hugs :)

I love this story and look forward for more. Great job!

All I have to comment on this garbage is that it's "bouquet" not "bucay". Try using spell check. Even if you're going to write crap, you can do so with proper spelling.

Great continuation of your story - when do you think you'll have another chapter out? Don't worry about the trolls of internet (previous comment).

This series is amazing and I love the way Alice is giving in to her lust for other women's bodies. Please can we have more of Alice giving in to her love of big breasts? If she has some of the liquid X that got her so horny at her first meeting with Nicole, she might even try it with her mother.

The changes in the point of view are irritating. The whole story started in third person, inbetween Alice seemed to be telling in first person, and now you alternate between Alice and Janet both in first person. Although being indicated on top of the paragraph it's both distracting and unnecessary, in my eyes.

But overall you have a great story here, I really love the mean twist that it's not Nicole being the blackmailer. Alice can't fight her, while Nicole doesn't realize that Alice doesn't want this at all. That makes it really special.

I hope you'll find a suiting end one day, and I wonder if it will just be the planned escape to college, a big blast which hurts everyone or some revenge scheme. Or something completely different.

I've enjoyed every chapter of this great story and this is the best, because it shows how much Alice is now enjoying her lesbian side and how close she is to admitting that she is now a tit-worshipping, pussy-pleasing slut. Great job!

I liked how you btought Janet into the story and have started corrupting her too. Can't wait to read the next chapters

Reading this excellent series again from the start, it's clear that you've told the story of Alice's descent superbly. Little by little she's been taken over by her lesbian desires, and this chapter is a big turning point as we see her getting pleasure out of a threesome that would have repulsed her when she was the good girl we first met in chapter one. Showing Janet having sex with someone young enough to be her daughter is also a big moment, and sows the seeds of mother-daughter incest that will hopefully come for her and Alice soon. This is a phenomenal series so ignore the haters. They could never do what you've done with this story.