by sex6writer9
But not much conversation. It needs a balance of both to make the story work.
By the way, Chardonnay isn't a sparkling wine.
Overall story was good, but the grammatical errors got to be too much after a while. Keep writing - I like your thought processes, but please clean up the grammar.
... get an editor. not a bad story but the mistakes were just too distracting. at one point you used the word 'balls' 4 times in one long run-on sentence. in another you wrote that you female character was stroking the young man's cock, fondling her breast and rubbing her pussy all at once, leading me to believe she has 3 arms. like I said, you started with a good idea but you really need someone to help you out.
Great story. Love older women . Hopefully there will be more to cumm !!!!