All Comments on 'Working At The Car Wash'

Nice short story. Noticed several errors. Would suggest using Grammarly if you don't already. It helps and its free.

Count all the spelling mistakes!

Also, so much detail about her & their relationship prior to the event itself makes you expect more Chapters, or some other form of more stories!

You need to have someone review your work before you submit it, too many misspellings and incorrect words.

He might have been a gentleman about it and married her

I give you a 4 vote. There is room for improvement. Perhaps the others who run you down should write their own storys. You will only improve in time ... like learning to ride a bike. As the hot prophit Hanna Montana says "Nobodys Perfect" Good luck with your writing.

Did you people come here to jack off or grade his english homework? Sheesh!

it was a cute story with a good ending but there were just a few errors in it but other then that it was good