All Comments on 'Working Hard'

4.0 GPA in Journalism, and says "As me and her were wrapping up …" instead of "As she and I …" He'll have a short life at the paper.

People are so damn critical on this site. This was a good story. Keep up the good work.

Very nice, is there going to be a second chapter? I would have voted for your story,however, there weren't any stars available after your story. By the way, 5 stars from me. :-)

I didn't think about it at first, but I would consider writing another chapter in the near future.

If she was over 18 why was she worried about her parents and not being home on time?

Not everyone can afford to live on their own, even at a college age.

So far I like this story. It has a plausiblity that will have to be carefully maintained through any further parts/chapters.

You will have to establish how he is able to afford an apartment, even in Brooklyn. You will have to establish more background on both of these people; giving him a name should be included. You may want to establish why she was not a virgin (an inference from how you described their first sexual encounter.)

That said, you are off to a good start. I look forward to seeing where you take this story.