All Comments on 'Workout Partners Ch. 01'

Switching from 1st to 2nd person in the past tense and back again over and over is awkward and bothersome. 2nd person is rarely used in story telling.

It's hard to picture who is involved when for a long time "I" and "you" give no indication of who's male and female. You could slip that info in to set the stage, or better yet just avoid the "you".

This is described perfectly and makes me want to be one of those lucky ladies!