All Comments on 'Yachting with My Sister Pt. 02'

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If you can't finish it; I'm not gonna try... LOL

I love your writings and we've talk and stuff before. I would love to do something with you but as much as I'd like to read more of this it's too far out of my comfort zone to do it justice. I'm having enough trouble with the stories I'm writing as is. Can't wait to see what you come up with next. Thanks for Sharing! 5 stars of course!

Really, you are leaving this tale, not ending it. It has been well-written and enjoyable.

I hope someone with talent concerning bacchanalia, with a smidge of incest served as well, takes it up.

If you write more, and we, your readers, can hope so, include in the description/ tags if the bro and sis become more important to each other.

Great story. I wish you were continuing it, but respect your decision not to.

Only 5 stars for quitting! LOL

PS, please let us know who picks up the ball & runs with it!

In the middle of the last section you switch Lee to Jeff then back?

Sorry to see it end but I think you did right to do so. Thank you.

Shame that you are not going to continue this story. You have left it as a bit of a cliff hanger

I also wish the story was continuing on to a better ending. That said I enjoyed it very much and my score reflects that. Ty for your efforts.

Loved the story. Would have liked to see it continue at least to Maureen getting some. Note: I noticed Lee's name changed to Jeff on page 4 or chapter 2.

Wtf?you set up a whole scenario for them to go adventuring then leave them at the dock?

I am sorry to see you are ending the story. I found it to be quite enjoyable and look forward to future stories. I would question the Jeff character on page four of the second part. I suspect Jeff was actually to have been Lee, but uncertain the regarding the late introduction of a new character.

Great fantasy. Please keep up the excellent work.

Have a breather and reconsider. It is a great storyline with wonderful opportunities.

Excellent ! Wish it were continuing but we can do our own story line.

Sorry you decided to do that - it has lots of legs!

This could have been a good series like Solstice was. And new series like Solstice coming down the tubes?

Six stars, ten if you continue this enjoyable story.

I really wish you would continue this story line. I can see many more adventures and fun in the future.

It's probably a good thing you ended it here. By the time Lori and Julie returned to the pier, you started calling Lee, by the name Jeff interchangeably... That gets confusing REAL quick... I had to read that section 3 times to make sure it wasn't just some new character that you decided to throw in there without an introduction.

Thank you for an enjoyable story.

I was hoping for many more chapters.

you have got to be kidding me. keep going please.

Hate to see it end but know it would get really unbelievable from here!

You did a fine job. Like the rest it would have been nice to see more, but you did better than most the way you left it. Good luck on your next endeavor.

Great story. You must continue the series.

I hate to see something that you’ve written that you’ve written as well as you have stopped the way you did. If somebody else were to attempt to write and finish this series of stories that you started in your style would not be doing justice to your type of writing.

I have enjoyed almost everyone of your stories and especially this last one. It’s a shame to end this series of this story the way you did.

It’s such a good story but you should finish it!

Loved it. It is a shame you chose not to continue a clear bit. I don’t think anyone can continue what you have started with the same theme and dialog. Good luck with future writings.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Too bad you're finished with this story. Hot stuff, and very fun reading. Could be interesting to follow this journey to the Med.

Afraid you completely lost my interest with the second chapter.

'Tis a shame you're ending it here. I was looking forward to reading about Julie's exploration of bondage and my envisioned couplings of both Lee and Maureen, and the three new crew.

I do hope you or someone else takes up this story again.

Great story! Would love to read more if it is ever written. Thank you..

Would love to see this made into a movie!

You got to keep going please.

It was a very good story, until you closed it out by giving up. I realize that is your prerogative, but I will go on record as disagreeing with it.

Great story. To bad you are ending it, but as a writer I understand how difficult at times to keep writing.

5 stars.

Too bad great story

What a shame, That was one of the best stories I have read on here. Please reconsider and keep it going. WOW!!

Fuck no part three NÒÒÒOOOOOOOO dam

This was a super fun read I'd love to see a continuation in the future.

Great story! Really wish you would continue this. Thank you for the adventure.

Like Most here its a true shame that you not at least doing one more chapter for the story. I realize that its time consuming and mentality exhausting and with great writing like this you could probably continue it on for 3 or 4 more chapters. I was hoping to at least see how the date went with Mo and Lee and see where Jules stood after their date. and perhaps a little about the 3 new crew members and how they figured into the equation of things.

Like everyone here I suppose we just have to post and ask of you one more chapter and if that doesn't move you respect you decision of ending it here with sadness that it won't continue.

As far as someone else picking up the ball and running with it from here I'm not so sure that's going to work as every writer has a unique skill set and mind set on stories and its not something that can be duplicated. 5 ++++ Stars for what has already been done tho.

Wow thats a shame no part 3 because this could end up being a more involved story with many more chapters. Would have lived to see what Maureen has in store for him and his sister.

:-( sorry to see you go

Leave them wanting, huh ? Damn it i need another chapter ! One thing is true he is a dead man !

No please write more

I am very sorry to see this come to an end. I hope you will reconsider.

Great story, I can see why you stopped here, this could go on for a long time. There is so much material, too bad I don't have talent to due justice to a great tale. The only thing really missing was the interlude between Maureen and Jeff, that would have been a great way to end this because I think she has feelings for him. YMO, and you know what those are, lolol. Thanks for writing it's much appreciated. You have a gift and I appreciate your sharing it with us 👍😊

Let us know if someone continues with this story.

So, let me ask one question I am certain a lot of folks have....had you already thought out who the men were trying to drug Lori and Julie? With three of them I hardly think it was date rape. Were you going to go off into something where Maureen is actually an agent of sorts for the govt, and those men were from the nefarious group Kaos? That is for Maxwell Smart fans. heh. I really would like a few sentences on where you might have thought this would go. Nothing detailed, but dropping it after three apparent assassins try to whack our heroine and a crew member....well that is a bit abrupt is the nicest way I can put it.

Regards,

Uncle Al

Excellent story. Here's hoping that whoever takes the baton keeps the dialog the way I've come to enjoy in Doc's stories: punchy, sometimes deadpan, and always smart.

By setting up the cruise as a cruise around the world, you bit off more than I would want to handle. The world cruise leaves it self open to just about anything (ever man's dreams of being on a yacht with eight women) and the world as it's stage. I think I would have set a more conceivable setting with a six week Caribbean cruise were each week could be a new chapter.

5 star story. I'm a little dissapointed that you don't continue this serie, but I understand. Keep Up the good writing

There is indeed all the required material for a saga here! As tempted as I am to take over, I don’t have the time nor the talent - I am no writer at heart, more a musician. So I don’t want to ruin everything by attempting to publish a sequel. But I’ll be glad if you or someone equally talented would take over!! Too bad we can’t rate 10 starts!

First of all, I loved both chapters. Second, I highly doubt that anyone who takes up the challenge of continuing the series will be up to the challenge. There are many authors on this site, but in each category, there are only a handful of truly good writers, in the literal sense, and they all have their own series and stories they're trying to get done. I shudder to think of someone trying and posting a new chapter when they can't even form proper sentences, not to mention not having an editor, or even thinking that they need one.

Thirdly, given the large number of stories you've posted in the past couple of weeks alone, even mentioning in one that most were those where your mind went blank on what direction to go with them, given what you posted, I would have preferred you just left them in your computer's memory and focused on chapter 3 and beyond. I'm not saying you're have to keep writing chapters for the entire world tour, but at least don't leave the relationships hanging, not to mention that whole kidnapping out of right field at the end. Sure, they can all be used by someone to continue the story, but I've only seen one decent author pick up a torch and put out decent work, and that was JC the Continuer, and even he pissed me off repeatedly, despite liking his overall efforts. Ok, I'll admit it, a lot of that is his removing all of his work from Literotica.com, and putting it behind a Patreon paywall, which is beyond my meager budget.

Rant aside, I would honestly be satisfied with two or three more chapters, though if you really tried, I guess you could tie up the loose ends in just one. For me, I really wanted to see how it worked out between Maureen, Lee and Julia. I was hoping for a solid throuple forming as the nucleus of the ship's complement, with a continued orbiting of crew-women. I really, really was looking forward to seeing a Diljan redheaded sandwich with Lori and the new redhead, April, of course with Lee and Co. on the side,......on top, and everywhere in between.

I’m very disappointed that have written such a well written story and let it dead end. There seem to be so much that you could do with this plot line. I hope you will reconsider and add two or three more chapters.

This obviously has a lot of potential and would be most readable. However, I can also see it going near-ballistic with possibilities. So, in spite of 'wishing for more', I agree with your decision to leave it.

You beast ! A great story with believable chats and tons of potential. Your story..... Your decision.....and still a great read. Thank you.

We want more, we want more, we want more........

I enjoyed both stories very much and with that I'm going to check out the rest of your work

would be 5 stars just wish there was another chapter

Ohhh, this is such a great storyline and you are an amazing writer, ohhh woo is me, I wish that you had continued this story!!! Truly, thank you for sharing this wonderful story and I will enjoy my imagination running wild with this theme. In the meantime, I have now found your writings and I look forward to reading more of your stories. Again, thank you!!!

You sir, have been watching actors perform pornagraphy way too much. (Notice that I correctly used the double 'o' format for 'to'. Your editor missed your mistake.) Quoting:

"...Diljan slowed, then pulled out. Lori immediately began tonguing Julie's gaping ass."

DISGUSTING AND NASTY! Porn stars have multiple enemas before they do an act like this to be certain that the bowels have been thoroughly flushed of ALL feces. This act performed as you described it would have resulted in Lori eating Julie's shit which would have more than likely given her a disease. My first wife's brother is gay and became sick with Salmonella after rimming his boyfriend.

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I really didn't see the point of ruining Julie and Lori's date with the attack considering that you had already planned on ending the story before Leeland and Julie even boarded the Liberty for the extended cruise. In fact, your choice of where to wrap your story made little sense at all. This chapter was a let down compared with the first one.

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I also wanted to point out that if Leeland and Julie BOTH held crushes for each other prior to Julie getting married, something should have happened to clue in either one or the other that there was something stronger between them. The two of them suddenly finding out that they had feelings for each other that had lain repressed for ten years or longer felt extremely contrived. 4/5

DocWords - Spoilsport!

Loved the slight humor and I'd like to see a new chapter on their trip, specially Lee trying to take care of the 5 off duty crew

It's not over so no rating yet!

In my opinion, the story got to be too much sex with not enough plot/character development to background the sex ... good writing otherwise

Fun and sexy! Thanks.

This is one of my favorite stories, I just finished reading it for the fourth time. I laugh every time when Maureen has her two henchmen throw Lee overboard.

Bummer, really hate it when an author drops a story when has only really gotten started.