All Comments on 'Year-The Future (The Beginning)'

aside from a few minor typos , NOT BAD ! further development is warrented here.

Thanks so much. Yes I agree I have many minor typos and grammar mistakes, but story content etc etc is most important to me. I've already submitted the second half of this, so it should show up soon. I'm actually still writing this so hearing feed back good or bad is vital to me actually being motivated to finish this piece. Thanks so much for reading. :)