All Comments on 'Yoga? Really?'

by lmnop321

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Scotsman69Scotsman69about 12 years ago
You constant change of person

from 'she' to 'you', was most distracting. You have potential, but need an editor.

mcollectmcollectabout 12 years ago
Chapter two?

Yes, this deserves another chapter.

ben_kiwiben_kiwiabout 12 years ago
Great

great story. definitely need a nother chapter. great read. beautifully written except the change in you and her.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Constant change of person 2

I'll have to agree with Scotsman69. Good story, though the constant change of person really became distracting near the end. Continue writing, but please consider finding an editor :)

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