All Comments on 'You Hear The Bullet'

Finally a cheating wife and plumber story with a happy ending.

This story was submitted for the February 2022 750 Word Project, but apparently not labeled as such.

Less scum in the world, nice

Husband's name wasn't Justice O. Peace was it? Nooo, wouldn't be would it? Short, to the point tale. - TANSTAAFL

I agree with 26thNC. A happy ending in the LW category.

A fun, short story. I liked it.

Good job.

Not sure if murder was the answer, but he definitely deserved to be punished. Being a horny male is not an excuse to fuck another man's wife. But the story would've been better with a 3rd person pov. It didn't feel right to hear it from a guy who was about to die.

What about the cheating cunt???? Did the slut hear her bullet too??? You could have saved a few words for that, you know. 1 star

Did the husband cap the slut also?

There was a time when snuff stories were not allowed on Literotica. Now, I guess anything goes. 1 star. No plot, no clever twist, just a stupid reaction resulting in death. At least show a little imagination.

Wow, that's a great 750 word story. You keep the tension throughout the story, even if we know the outcome from the beginning. Very impressive! 5* and kudos, JB

I know it's only 750 words from the POV of the dead man, but I wish he could have lived long enough to see the bitch shot, too. And no, I don't believe in murder porn, but if the guy is gonna be shot, then the cheater deserves to be, also.

Really?

I was leaning toward one shot, two kills. Did the bullet go through him and into the skank?

Only better outcome would be if there were two shots and she lay bleeding out beside him.

You know why this isn’t a 5 story. The cuckolds are pissed off

Sorry, but I very strongly don't condone murder for infidelity. Intimidation yes.

Murder always leads to the betrayed party paying.

Excellent short story. 5 stars

For a 750 word submission, this was very well done!

And I concur with 25thNC's comment. LMAO!!

Not a fan of first person narration from beyond the grave. Would have worked better for me had it been written in third person.

Rolls eyes. There is nothing more pathetic than someone who commits murder over cheating.

Well the cucks wont be happy but the low IQ'ed fragile beta ammosexuals will be jerking their dicks like Trump does to Putin pics.

who wrote this story and the MC was killed?

Ah yes, murder. Only cowards kill their spouses. I have no respect gor the asshats who kill.

Thank you despite all the comments from the emotional retards. Like those who never draw a line in the sand, they pead for the mother's killer to have mercy. The think any form of balancing the scales is anathema, so they criticize those who have fought and died for truth, justice, another American way. Guess it's not popular to expect those who swore before God to be fidelity's. Thanks for writing about one incident that ends quickly with out self reproachment embracing a final consequence.

Well written, powerful short story. Thank you

Kill him, then rot in jail. Everyone loses.

But I must say, it was well written, kudos!

WTF is this shit? You know this is a site for erotic stories not snuff right?

I GAVE THIS STORY THE MAX BECAUSE OF THE END BUT SOMETHING SHOULD'VE HAPPENED TO THE WIFE AS WELL.

Well written, tight, terse prose. Five stars ⭐️ for this one!

Ouch!

5 stars

About as good as a LW story could be.

Very well told in the confines of 750 words

In typical L.W fashion, one whore fucks up the lives of two men. If this had been a story of a gun wielding, scorned wife, the same people criticizing this story would have had the "you go ahead a shoot him sister, nobody will blame you" attitude. The double standard is a slap to face of all how read here.

IMOP, the wife should have caught one as well, she started it and when smoke clears she'll just do this again to some other sucker.

[03.02.23]

Top Shelf!

11/10!!!!!

Going to prison anyway might as well shoot the slut

So short but sooooo good.

Puta smile on my face as I read it as well

Well that was a little dark.