All Comments on 'You. Owe. Me. Ch. 06'

Very unsatisfying ending. I see this part was written in 2006 so no chance of a true ending after all this time. It's sad that this is happening all too often here. I have read several series only to come to the last page of the last submission to find a cliff hanger that then never gets resolved. Maybe it would be better for authors to hold their work and submit it when completed? It would save a lot of reader frustration.

Fuck. Ended worse than a case of blueballs.....

MADDOGINTEXAS, what conclusion? I see nothing after chapter 6, the lack of ending dropped it from 4 or 5, down to 1 or 2.

Well, I DO see there is a conclusion chapter to this...and I am off to read it!!

Before I do, tho'...I still love this story, the emotion and love between Laura and Chris is palpable...now we will see how they can handle a little intrusion by the bitch Rebecca...she really let both her "friends"have it with that little comment.

Becky led Chris on...her comment about 'sex for the joy of sex' or whatever...we could see the duplicity of her mind even as we read it...and while she was gonna bang Simon...

**5** Stars...again, I love the story...hope the 'conclusion' is going to be satisfactory, and NOT disappointing...

Unfortunately, we need writers in the erotic side of adult relationships who finish the work. It's been so long but you have to wonder what happened to the author... I like the details of life the person included. Another writer could read this story and bridge in missing pieces plus finish it. This one deserves a proper conclusion. Heck, it could carry on in several more chapters.

Don't like the way it ended. I thought they made a perfect couple and I loved him been together.

What the hell, that's it??

Laura contains a surprise for both herself and her brother. She will discover she is pregnant. That will motivate her to reconcile with him but she will demand some pretty inflexible ground rules.

How can an author bring a story along so good and then leave the reader hanging. It is so wrong not to finish this story. This was a 5 star story until this end leaving the reader hanging. 3 stars

The end of chapter 6 ruined the story for me and dropped it from 4 star to a single star. If it were possible to give it a lower grade I would. It's pretty obvious that you won't fix your story with a 7th chapter so I'm done reading your junk.

Great story! Well written!! Know it's been quite some time, but really hoping you get around to finishing this...

Please finish this.

You have me sucked in . I have to read more. Left me with so many questions.dont let it end like that

No more? The story doesnt have any closure..

I was hoping for so much more in the Ending ... I liked most of the Story but the Ending I hated ..

Don't tell me it's gone off..... This is not how this ends. More Please

You start to ramble on putting in filler to stretch the story. A good story but be more concise.

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Because it's been 11 years since an update. Such a shame for such a great story to end without a conclusion.

Loved the story but the amount of sex was not necessary. More of the back story would of filled in some of the blanks 8EB3

Hey uh bro. It may have been 10 years, I think. But can we have a continuation please? Lol.

People like to really fuck these stories up by getting others involved. They have enough problems to look forward to with others. Whether there's more or not whether they get together again I will not know I will not be watching for it or read. It makes me sick.

There's going to be more, I hope.

This was one of the hottest stories I have ever read it the history of my literotica readings but I will never read anything from this FUCKED UP author again. This unfinished story made me loose all respect for the author and literotica for allowing it to be left unfinished.

Even though it's been almost eight years, I implore the author, if they're still active here, to finish this story. Even if it's just a quick, half-assed wrap-up, any resolution is better than none at all.

I've never commented or said anything but this story is amazing and I might just go crazy if I don't hear an eding

I agree you need to come back and finish this!!

WHY THE FUCK DIDN'T YOU FINISH THIS STORY? THIS, BY FAR, IS THE MOST INTENSE SHIT I'VE EVER READ TO ONLY FIND OUT THAT IT ISN'T FINISHED. DAMN. FUCK. SHIT!!!

People say end it, I say keep it going.

Terrific story. Love it. I would love to read the ending.

Awesome series. Finish it!

can you please... write your conclusion i love your writing!! and i dont think anyone else finishing it can do your writing and story justice! btw

I really hope there is more coming because i really love it!! and would hate to see it end this way!!

I loved the whole series, but teh chapters were a little short and you need to make an ending to it.

Liked the story well written and flowed nicely but did not like the infatuation you seem to have with pot

Ok the depth of the characters is Justitie annoyingly good.

And nice storyline arch. You are a great writer. NOW pleaaase don't keep us in suspense . Cant wait to see how this plays out. (big blergh at becky btw)

wow we need more

R, how much longer do we have to wait. I feel a connection to chris and laura and desperately wanna see the next chapter.

Please write the next chapter soon.....I could get run over by a gas truck tomorrow and die not knowing what becomes of Chris and Laura. That would make it all the worse

This has to be one of the best stories i ever read if u could some how get this made into a book im sure lots of ppl would read and enjoy it. U have soome real talent and i cant wait for the end of this one and the next story u write on here

Oh...my- just x_x this is the most amazing thing ive ever read and such a cliffhanger aaghh i need more! so good! >__<

Your writing is unbeleivable, and i felt like i could everything that Chris and Laur felt. I didn't like it when chris cheated, but i now feel like he has already payed his penance, just for the pain he was recieving. Wonderful story, now off to read the last chapter. :D

I'm just horrible when it comes to finishing things. I know it's been years since I last posted anything for this story, and I'm very sorry to any of the readers who have run out of patience. But the 7th and final chapter is in the works, it's just taking me some time (obviously). I won't make empty promises about when it will be ready, but I can promise I have not forgotten you, Literotica.

- RJ

It was 2:30am when I started reading the first chapter of the series. I was depressed and very horny, so I thought a little literotica would help me get to sleep faster. Oh my god, now it's 5:49am. I'm at the edge of my bed waiting for the most romantic fairytale ending to happen, and I don't even care about the fact that I'm waking up in 3 hours!

This story has drawn me in so perfectly. Every scene between Chris and Laura has pulled and tightened me in closer and closer to the story line. Despite me being an 18 year old guy, I've never felt so sympathetic for a character than I have Laura. The romantic details are great, the characters are well-created and believable, and you have a knack for gutting the storyline and giving us the main course. Your work is truly amazing and it's never felt so good to stay up late reading such an enthralling and subtle love story. Thank you:)

the guy who rote this has died. this is not the end tho he wrote another almost finished chapter about laura and chris in which he explained how they had becky swear not to tell simon and simon had been oblivious and where he'd eventually had chris bang the door down and explain to laura what he felt, the story concludes with him and her explaining to their mom and dad and deciding to move out and the parents decide to stop them saying it's ok to b like this... i'm not a good writer like rj228212 but i can't make up how he'd realy end it there wasn't and ending per se' but that was as much as he'd writen srry all

How can you end like that?? whats wrong with you?? why would you do that to your audience?? please write the next one soon. weed makes everything better.

It is an amazing story please finish!

Please do not leave it like this! It is such a great story, but it is not finished yet. Please say you are not stopping???

What happens between Chris and Laura?

Im hoping you almost done with you 7th chapter and if there isnt going to be one there HAS TO BE ONE!!

u need to make a 7th cuz i need to know wat happens after.

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You're stopping now?!?! You can't stop now, write more the story is NOT anywhere near finished!!! Good story line and great writing!!! Don't stop now!!!

Please write more it sucks to have it ended like this!! and make sure Chris and Laura make up!!!!

I have just read all of them and now there needs to be more.. Its very addicting and good In my opinion. Please write more, because this is like an abrupt ending.

PLEASE WRITE MORE CHAPTERS! YOU'RE AN AMAAAZING WRITER AND I'M ADDICTED!!!!!

I'M HAVING WITHDRAWLS :(

I knew for several episodes that their secret was not going to stay their secret, what I find disappointing is who was tasked with speaking to the hedonists. BJ Becky doesn't qualify. Parents, maybe, or police. The question of whether there is anything wrong with what they did is never answered. Certainly, kids like this have means and opportunity, but so what. Ever without a step sibling kids find someone to service them. The real story, and not a pleasant one,is how the step kids continue to share the bathroom at home. That could be agony.

I actually got bored with the sex scenes and was just interested in the story. you're a pretty good writer.

amazing story!!! you should continue it!! i swear!! cannot wait for the next one!

Great great greeeat story! Wish it had more chapters though...I became addicted ;)

Great story man, Just goes to show when you fuck up, things can get really fucked. Puns intended of course. Hope it ends happily.

this ending sucks for a great story

You cant let it end like this. U have to make a chapter 7. if not that was a horrible ending to a terrific story.

don´t let it end like this...brilliant story !!!!

come on give me more it cant end like that

Great story, one of the best I've read around here recently.

FUCK that made me make an account just to subscribe, in case you keep going that is, dude you should this story is AMAZING it got me sooooo turned on, and it had actual love in it. i loved this story so much

Cant end like that... more!!

Oh! Pleaaaase please please finish! It's got me SO drawn in :D

Please finish it!!!! Prettttyyy pleaseez

I could not stop reading this i have been stuck at my computer for the last 2 days reading. Your writing is so encapsulating your details in all the events are wonderful. I was a bit diapointed that you did not write the ending yourself becuse as others im sure once i finished reading this chapter i wanted to know how it was all going to end. I think if you wrote the ending for this yourself it would be much better.

I think Laura should punish Chris for being such a fool, but then Chris deserve an opportunity to explain, to justify his actions, he and Laura are so perfect for each other she'll forgive him, eventually. Becky needs to be killed....sorry know she is fictional, still you don't do stuff like that to people. I reckon she knew it was Chris in the bathroom all along and she wanted to "get even" with Laura for some long ago run-in.

when's the next sequal??

i cant wait for it!

very well written!

You have this story set up perfectly, in any sense. I truly love it. Whatever you do, wherever you are, keep writing.

Can you post the link to the story completetion please? I can't wait for some freakin' closure.

I am assuming you do not write anymore or maybe just not for this site but, you may want to thank author Sgeorge for completing your story. He did a good job. Although your story was very good, it didn't have an ending.

ACK, what a HUGE let down to see no ending to this story. I'm assuming that there will not be an conclusion since you have not updated it since 2006. What a disappointment!!! I hate when I get wrapped up in a story that just stops without a conclusion. HUGE DISAPPOINTMENT to a good story.

I sat and read this whole thing and I am officially addicted!!! Good luck with the next chapter, I will be looking forward to it with very high expectations!!! You're an awesome writer!

OH MY FUCKING GOD!!!! Please hurry with the next chapter, I'm addicted. I read the whole thing in one sitting and was sooo disappointed it ended there. Please hurry I absolutely loved it.

It really needs a more conclusive ending. Other than the lack of a true ending, it is a great series.

There really has to be another chapter or 2 after this. It ending this way wrenched me from my seat. I'll admit there's typos and awkward wording here and there, but at this point I dont care, the story is great, and that's all that matters.

Please, continue this!!

Awesome.cant wait to read the next chapter. they hve to kiss and make up... :-D

WOW! Luv it, was wonderful plus the way it was phrased. Read all six and was perfect. Cant wait to read the next chapter. Didnt see Shannon coming but figured something coming up with Becky, Chris is kind of slow. BUt good characters and cant wait to see how things spice up.

I like the whole series...More! Well done, erotic, and a good read.

you have to continue to write, stopping now would kill me and all the other readers who enjoyed this story as much as i did

please write more

:)

thank you

brittany

Nice. Passion complex emotive characters.

Really like the immediate issues.

1. Some tough editing would improve it.

2. Laura is a bit too crazy

3. I'm concerned that resolving the tension will make it passe .

4. If your really good, I'd roll it back a bit and see if you can convincingly develop a poly romance (this is a very tough challenge since it is not commonly experienced). How close are Chris and Brad? Chris and Laura could have confessed their attraction to the buddies earlier.

they need to be TOGETHOR......CONTINUE PLEASE!!!! Don't STOP HERE!!

I read the six chapters and I loved it!!!! It's the best story I've read so far, the plot line is amazing... But it shouldn't end here, keep writing

I just finished reading all six chaperes. I loved the story. It was very well written. I feel there is room for the story to continue; in other words. Keep writing. You have talent. Another chapter or twenty would be nice.

Thanks again:

jim9894

This is an awsome story, the description, the emotion, and the way you painted the story into my mind. I love how every chapter keeps me interested in what happens next. Just awsome, one of the best stories i ever read, and its not just a sex story theres so much background story and filler to make it "Full" and real. Just an outstanding job! I cant wait to read the rest of this! POST SOON!

YOU NEED TO FINISH THIS!! I CAN FORSEE LIKE 15 MORE CHAPTERS IN THE FUTURE!! DO IT!!!!!

OMFG I LOVED IT I WANT MOREEEEE OMG!!!! you have to finish it i have to find out if they stay together they have to omg that was the best story i have read in likr 4 ever omg omg omg i have to read more plzzzzzz finish i will be waiting :) cant wait to read the rest!!! o0o ur an amazing writer:)

You gotta finish the story i LOVE it

You have to finish this. We cant be left hangning like this. PLeas Pleas please finish this....

When I was 15 my 12 yr old stepsister and I began expirimenting. At first we just felt each other up, but one night she told me she wanted to see mine and that she would show me hers. As soon as I was exposed she grabbed my cock and demanded that I take her virginity. I was a little apprehensive at first, but the thought of pressing my hard cock into her tight, wet pussy was too much. She spread her lips and as i slid in i almost exploded inside her. She was so tight that my cock didn't fit all the way inside of her. She straddled me and rode my cock until it exploded all over her pussy. She wanted me to cum inside her, but I refused. Then after I came all over the outside of her hole she put it back inside her, which i probably shouldn't have let her do. I still get hard instantly just imagining the site of her cum covered cunt.

NAOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

please put up more!!!! love it

this series is absolutely fantastic and i cant wait for you to put the next chapter up!

I already sent you a message - could get the comment submission on my iPhone.

So about 3 weeks ago you said you were coming back, and I'm glad! I'd be happy to see another 100 chapters of this, honestly.

If Chris and Laura end up together happily in Chapter 7 and that's the end - I'll be happy, but I'd love to see this carry on so much further!

You have such a wonderful talent and the vivd description makes me want this to become a movie or something! What Chris and Laura get up to - it's not seedy, it's loving, tender and carefully thought out.

I'm one of the many people who really can't wait for your next submission - so drop whatever else is going on in your life and satisfy us all :D

Jenna x

Nice series man....keep up da gud work....hope da next chapter is coming up soon....great job!!

a great read very well written ........ but u will finish it or i'll call u names lol