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Click here"From now on you will now orgasm with 70% greater ease than you ever have before. Whats more, every orgasm you have will be 130% more intense than anything you've yet experienced and will last a minimum of 5 minutes continuously at their peak intensity."
"Further, from this point forward you desire me most of all. You are completely bi-sexual and want each other in addition to anyone else I instruct you to want. Your sex drive will be maintained at the same level of an 18 year old boy and the sight of genitalia will fill you with the same levels of lust you are now experiencing."
This time he saw no change in either woman, but suspected they were already wrapped up in that state of mind anyway. It was now Darren's turn to enjoy them, and as he was beyond any level of erection or desire he'd ever experienced.
He instructed them both to sixty-nine while he stripped. In seconds both girls were greedily licking each other and sucking their engorged clits like tiny cocks. Amy was on the bottom and Felicia's spread pussy and ass were displaying themselves to Darren while Amy busily worked and groaned.
Darren kneeled behind her and in one movement used her slickness to slide his 7" fully inside her. The intensity of so many new and incredibly powerful sensations was more than Felicia could handle. As Darren glided over her g-spot, Amy sucked hard on her clit. Felicia's head shot up and she let out a piercing scream.
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!"
She gasped as both Amy and Darren continued.
"AAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. GWWWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAA."
Her spasming pussy was contracting so hard on Darren's dick it was squeezing out her cum all over him and Amy's face. It didn't stop either. As intended, her orgasm lasted on and on; her hand gripping Amy's thighs so hard she was drawing blood. As she neared the finally of her cum Darren reached his peak.
Thrusting crazily, over and over he exploded inside of her, releasing a torrent of his own that seemed like it would never stop. Amy still had some orgasm of her own left and her contractions continued to pump Darren and her juices all over Amy's greedily licking mouth.
Needing a moment to recuperate, Darren pulled Felicia off and both collapsed on the floor. Panting, Darren instructed Amy to masturbate to her own grand finale while looking at them. She did so and was overcome herself with her orgasm.
It was incredible, and Darren couldn't wait to figure out what was next. He needed to talk further with Hassem and gain more insight into what might be done. First though, he needed to see what else he could do with his newest servants.
End Part 1
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoGood. Minor typo:
was wondering to thoughts
should be:
was WANDERING to thoughts
Anonymousover 8 years agoBetter if he finds a purpose beyond mind control of every hot girl.
eaglewolf1963almost 9 years agoOk why do they always not finish the good stories. More please.
Anonymousalmost 9 years agoWhile I did spot a few spelling and grammar errors, your writing style is very good. Keep up the work, and try to find someone to check it out before submission.
I can't wait to see where you take this...
disableddanover 10 years agoAll in all, it's a good start, though. I confess, I'm a bit surprised he did nothing to better his financial position or his standard of living, but hey, that's just a bit of my greedy nature showing itself (grin) The bit about being unable to contract or transmit diseases, though, was, in my humble opinion, inspired. Very thoughtful.
Farissabout 11 years agoAuthorThank you everyone for the constructive advice. This is a first chapter I worked on some time ago and will be following up on soon. There has been some discussion of brevity. In this instance I attempted to write the sort of story I enjoy reading, one that has a thought out backstory but isn't too long in a single chapter. I admit there is an abrupt jump to the action near the end of the story. In this instance I felt a reader would be ready for something more erotic at this point. In regards to mathematical percentages, I envision Darren being very specific. All too often these themed stories are written with the character being vague in their directions. This usually leads to some twist later based on him messing up. In this story I wanted to avoid that happening and let the reader assume (perhaps incorrectly on my part) that Darren would have been exacting in his instructions. Thank you again for the feedback and in the future rest assured there will be better proofreading.
rhevabout 11 years agoHello Fariss,
I think this story is a great first attempt at your writing here on Literotica. I think that you've got a great subject, one that's always fun to explore and usually popular for scifi-fantasy. I think that you do have some room to improve, but that you've also done some things that were done quite well.
The one criticism I would like to make would be your use of a sixty six character long 'word' with no spacing or break. Typing "Aaahh!" is essentially the same as "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!" We as readers understand the idea behind a long drawn out scream. A few paragraphs earlier you established that the orgasm would be five minutes long, but that doesn't translate to readers in forcing them to read an overly long word. In addition there's never a need to use more than one exclamation point. That's what it's there for, to denote an exclamation. Adding more doesn't actually add anything to the imagery. However what the extended 'word' does do, is completely screw up the formatting for people reading the story on mobile devices, kindles, or monitors with lower resolutions (for example someone who uses large font for visual disability reasons).
I think that this first chapter is a great launchpad for what could be a neat chapter story, and one that I personally would read. I also think that unlike some other people, there is often a call for brevity. Some people don't like shorter stories, but some people do. I wouldn't call your story 'too short' in any way, though I think there's a lot of room for you to add more details in the future.
I really hope to see more from you in this series!
-Rhev
Anonymousabout 11 years agoBenign, not begnine. No such thing as exctasy.
In addition, it was too rushed, almst perfunctory.
Needs some polishing.
shuriken2012about 11 years agoi like your take on the whole genie thing...its different than the whole sex genie and offers a nice change of pace. however it was a bit rushed and darren just jumped on the train way too quickly. other than that nice job. and please do not take that suggestion to make him a girl....that is just wrong and creepy on so many levels
