All Comments on 'Youth Awakening'

Many, many problems here.

First, we know next to nothing about these people. Some info would help.

Second, you use a lot of sentence fragments, run-on sentences, and odd punctuation.

Third, and this is a real pet peeve, the plural of breast is b-r-e-a-s-t-S - note the capital, for emphasis. You wrote: She had giant breast 40DD -- are you kidding me?

Get an editor and re-release this story in a version 2.0 This was bad.

this aint a story i read the first 2 lines then scrolled down im so glad i didnt waste 30seconds reading this and in answer to your last few words NO and please dont write any more

truly terrible

please do not write anymore of this crap