by Shotokan07
it sucked. nice theory but expand a bit and make it make sense....
I agree with um. It sounds like you slapped this together in five seconds, or else you are not a native speaker and you suck at typing. Otherwise, the story is okay, if a bit far-fetched and quick
dude nice theory but 1) don't call breasts "meat" 2) don't call women bitches and 3) do a grammar check of the story cos a lot of it doesn't make any fucken sense.