All Comments on 'Zero, Fifty, or One Hundred'

Get with reality

I enjoyed this chapter. The dialogue is clear and concise, the characters are rational and relatable and the tension has built nicely. I agree with the previous commenter. The little black dress is sketchy for ‘just dinner with a friend.’

Not a good look for the loving wife. Top notch drama. Crack on.

Why was she wearing her LBD?? Nah, bro.

She cheated, dump her ass. Lying, flirting, giving her fucking panties to and deep kissing the guy. Come on, that's just too much. Of course it turns RAAC here but most guys wouldn't take that slut back. She's proven to be deceitful, untrustworthy, and is liable to stray again at the next road bump in the marriage, should he give her a second chance. I just don't see how any sane person would see past all that. He deserves better. Working his ass off to give his family a good life while still trying to be a good father and husband, and that's the thanks he gets from his wife? Fucked up.

Interesting that he only said if she hadn’t had relations with Luke he’d think about it. Idiot! He left the door wide open for her to lie about all the other men she may have had.

Another tragic tale about a man who sacrifices his soul and his marriage to a job and a woman who goes running off to another man at the first hint of friction in the marriage. JR

Pathetic, I wouldn't stay with her at all. And what's the pathetic husband sorry for, he was working his ass for their life to have a secure comfortable life and oh wow she gets to be slutty behind his back. And the mc is sorry for this like seriously? What choice is there to make, divorce her ass he's still young, successful and move on. But as usual author's gives options for a raac bringing in the kids, marriage counseling etc etc, I'll take a reconciliation if it's done right. But this the husband attitude to solve the problem is not likeable at all.. he should have just said I know about your late night dates behind my back and be done with it,giving shitty options, now it's like it's the husband is the want who is working to save the marriage and towards reconciliation not the cheater. She didn't do anything to deserve a second chance after he gave her the option.. now no matter how the author tries to make it up, it's the mc who gave second chance for no reason just because he love's her so much as usual with lots of trashy wimp mc. Now obviously the slutty wife will take the best option available, and the mc wimpy husband forgives her and a stupid raac story is done

Great call by the husband.

It's the lies by omissions that are the most deadly in marriages, especially when some asshole is trying to work their way into your wife's pants. That's because they can pile up to such an extent while still making it seem like she's not really doing anything wrong, at least in her head. And all it takes is one seed (usually placed there by some slut, as is the case here) and there's never a shortage of pussyhounds to help that seed grow.

Sharon made one little mistake after another (handing her panties was a big one but she was drunk as hell because Luke kept plying her with booze; that was his plan though to get her to do something foolish he could use against her) and it escalated to the point where in her head she's justifying going to see him because he's blackmailing her, which to be honest is a very thin excuse, but at this point in her little delusional world is more than enough. She's caught up in the current of her own bullshit and probably didn't even realise it. She doesn't seem like she wants to cheat based on her texts; she just feels like this is how she gets rid of that video, and maybe also a little male attention. Let's hope she makes the right decision now that all the cards are on the table.

Nice to see someone be a decent person and tell the husband what’s going on. Of course, the friend should have told him much sooner, but at least she finally got around to doing the right thing.

ZK

Dumbass. You don’t give her choices, she’s already made her choices. She engaged in dating behavior, and opened her heart to another man. She already ended the marriage. Divorce just lets the government know.

ZK

Great setup ... now on to YOUR conclusion... I can hardly wait.

Incomplete story.

Finally.... a writer whose MC takes charge like a person in real life would!! Fifty Stars.

Really well constructed. She is right on thr edge. The text messages tell a lot. Lot of LW drama. Friend tipped him off (you go Linda!) and husband is assertive yet rstional.

This was LW drama at it's very best. Filled with suspense and intrigue with believable characters acting in believable ways, culminating in a dramatic confrontation and a cliff hanger ending. 5 stars I give but that score doesn't do justice to this fine work.

⭐⭐⭐

Hhmmm, watts it gonna be?? Gonna be nother chapter??? LP

good first chapter where is the rest?

Great and tense story. 5 stars

I don't get the third choice if she has already had sex with him. He's still willing to give her a chance??? Not buying it.

Can’t do Ahazura without this classic. One of my top 25 favorites in LW.

3 stars and I would have gone one step further to see a lawyer for a separation agreement to lay in front of her.

Then she would see the concrete evidence that her marriage was hanging by a very thin thread.

One more false move and she would be a struggling single divorced parent.

Sounds fair enough

The story has no end

So tied up in work bomb could go off.

Family always before work.

Make time to discuss day

Doesn't need much time.

Working and studying for CPA exam still found time for family.

No communication and then? Especially wife time

Pandora's box

Even when work gets hectic HAVE to make family time

Onen of the best stories ever. So good that even swingerjoe couldn't mess it up.

finish it

I've read many stories where the husband hires a detective, gets the evidence, and divorces his wife. I've often wondered why he doesn't just confront her at the start and draw a line in the sand. Good story. 5*****

I thought the husband was smart in this series. Rather than the unrealistic "i become a super spy" kind of BTB tale (i enjoy those to sometimes) it was more realistic about defending the relationship which he valued. The wife was also smarter than a lot of the stupid-bitch stories where the level of nonsense is so unrealistic (but fun also at times).

Thanks for giving us this story and showing how it doesn't always have to be the extreme. Hope to see more creative-entries from you in the LW category.

Was she fooling about for 3 months or 2 months? I hate it when the writer doesn't even know either!

I found several sequels. IMO can not improve on Ahazura's conclusion to his own story. However, streetdog may equal it. Strangelife's sequel (listed in Ahazura's Favorites) is, well, strange -- too offbeat for me. Stormbreyer's finish is unfinished, and for that reason, may rank lowest, although he started off well. Then Swingerjoe takes it in a direction not consistent with Ahazura's original, trying an untried scenario that would have been better left untried. FD45 recognizes this and tries to fix it, and maybe improves it, but it's better to just not read Swingerjoe and therefore not need FD45. I guess there's another fix-it of Swingerjoe by Anthony (?) but I did not read that.

Suggestion:. Read Ahazura's conclusion and/or streetdog's. The time that could have been used for the other sequels, spend on Cat5, Rehnquist, TxTallTales, Thucydides or your favorite author.

5 stars for both Ahazura's original story and sequel.

Paul in Oklahoma

He has given her three choices. Hope she picks the right one. Glad I found your work.

so because he has a short term work increase, to provide better for her/family, she decides to cheat and act like a slut.

Throwing away her child's future.

wow what a woman.

I am not a burn the bitch kind of a guy. I believe in reconciliation and forgiveness. However she is such a liar it is hard to see how he could repair that kind of deceit.

I gave a 5 for great writing.

to give this bitch a chance. Get the PI to get pics and move on otherwise.

No this is how a reasonable man willing to give his wife a chance she does not deserve speaks. At this point he could give a shit and walk if she has a problem with the choices. You sound like a femdom kind of person.

Those were the words of a man that didn't want his marriage to survive. Many women would have told him to fuck off and left. Some women would have gone back upstairs, taken a shower and gone to bed. No women would have taken him to see Luke. Not with an attitude like his. Many would have told him to go ahead and divorce her. She'd take the house, full custody, alimony and child support. She's also take half of any bonus he got and half his retirement and IRA. And then she'd go out and find a man that actually loved and respected her. Maybe kick him in the balls on her way upstairs.

And then you added insult to injury by not putting any kind of ending to this mess.

Awful story telling.

No stars

While in the LW universe they always spell trouble, I'm amazed at how many comments there are that say that THEY would never let THEIR lives have a GNO!

Don't they ever go out with the guys? Does that mean they are looking for some pussy? Then why deny their wives the same privilege?

jump to part 2.

Thanks for sharing.

Had to skim this before reading the new sequel.

She "owes" him dinner for making sure the video didn't get out.

It didn't get out YET. She only has his word (ugh) that it was deleted, and even if it was,how many copies have been made? I'll bet anything that if she went to that dinner he would have used the video to get her into bed,

Did I read that right? There's a lack of morality on a porn site?

Someone call Larry Flynt.

Good story but the confrontation came too late. Much too late. Women don't court or fool around with other men while deciding whether or not to stay with their husbands. The agony of deciding already happened long before this stage. They do agonize for a long time, but that time is over. At this stage, they are making sure the guys they are fooling around are good choices before jumping ship. If not, they will find some other guys, and it's just a matter of time before they leave their husbands.

It's amusing that the husband in the story sounds like he still has control while the wife hangs her head in shame. In reality, she would simply shrug indifference as he presents her with choices, and would tell him to start packing.

LW is a totally Bipolar category, with its only constant being a lack of consistency. c: Some go there because they want to read about cheaters or cuckolds while others enjoy those who rise above the temptations. Being tricked or tricking others seems to be another frequent sub-genre. I liked your open-ended 'Lady or the Tiger' twist AND the promise of various conclusions to follow.

I'd nag about wanting your next Wizard chapter but I wouldn't want to be one of those who complain the author supplying them with pleasure (FOR FREE !!!) isn't performing fast enough. On the other hand, is it ok to whine just a little bit? Pretty pleeease?

We know she is being blackmailed. Doesn't like it. Has regret. But doesn't know how to get out of the set up on her own.

My only question is how messy will the confrontation with the company predator be? If, she chooses option 3, the only sure thing is at least one of "the crew" will also be there with a camera.

The fact that he is working hard for them does not have any effect on the women of

LW. Seems to be a misogynist tendency.

I am sick of the lack of morality shown by characters on this site. Does she expect him to want to be a cuckold or something. The basis of your story is fine, I just feel you need to express the emotion and angst of the situation in a more detailed way. It seems he is just moving from one step to another without any real turmoil at the betrayal by his wife.

You are obviously a gifted writer. You craft your prose and tell your story very artfully. The visuals are well handled. At the end of the day, it's just a bit too straight-laced for my liking. I read loving wives to experience more free spirits. That said, please keep writing. You are obviously gifted. It's just different strokes for different folks. I love Jamoca Almond Fudge and you gave me vanilla.

...don't spoil a good start by leaving it unfinished

Lets keep it going

gonna be tough to match that opening, but I enjoyed your tale and look forward to "..the rest of the story."

Please, hurry on next chapter!

Seems quite obvious what will happen. If the storyline is to be consistent, there is no way she simply goes out. Her texts indicate her reticence about going beyond just dinner.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

.....but she had already gone so far out of her marriage, she may be unable to win him back.

He will be doing all the forgiving and she all the sucking up. That will fort old, and when the next demanding project comes along, he will have no foundation of trust to believe that she won't take up with some slimeball again.

Once she's demonstrated that she handles loneliness with faithlessness, she's kinda become damaged goods.

My wife pulled a similar stunt in our 6th year together. I took work in another state and suggest she stay and live her life with her boyfriend.

She was inconsolable and I wasn't interested in making her feel any better at that point. I began packing my stuff and the boy's stuff (we had two boys, 6 & 4 then), studiously avoiding her and her stuff. On the day I was set to depart, the following week, she came out and got in the rental truck with us, looking forward, her jaw set, saying nothing.

We talked about six weeks later, she confessing her affair and saying she'd rather live with me anywhere than stay at home without me. We're still together, but it has never been the same, nor as good as those first 6 years.

where the star rating is decided. Well done so far I hope the next chapter is not long in coming.

Marriage is already over. The husband in order to remain married will have to do all the repair work. This is the problem with reconciliation. Now people will argue they haven't had sex, irrelevant. Cheating in most cases happens well before the physical act. In this story the wife has already cheated emotionally and intellectually. And while most people do not consider kissing cheating, kissing is more intimate than sex. So the husband must forgive all this with no reason to do so and then be ever vigilant because clearly she is untrustworthy.

So he must also cut back on his career which is her reason for her actions. Thus decreasing their standard of living all in the attempt to keep a marriage that clearly she doesn't value. This is a no win situation for the husband. He divorces her and the child loses a stable home. He keeps her and spends the next thirteen years fire brigading his marriage.

Ok, congrats on writing and posting you're story. Not sure why you picked the toughest category- but you did. Do keep writing, enjoy the positive comments, shrug off the bottom feeders, and consider any advice from those in the middle. On the whole you've got a C+ here. I don't know why some writers feel the need to tell the reader what they're going to do...have a little faith that we'll figure it out. And since you are setting us up for part 2, leave us dangling, stop it at the little black dress and "we need to talk."

Generally you have a much better chance of getting a "truer" answer by simply asking questions, questions, questions. Multiple choice questions, especially with consequences attached ain't gonna tell you much about WHY. You've put her in the position of going along with what you want because you're in charge right now. So she ends it with the sleaze, so you beat him up or get him fired, BIG FUCKING DEAL, if she was as committed to her course of action as putting on that little black dress indicates, a line has been crossed, a choice was made...no chance of unringing that bell man.

Anyway, good luck, waiting to see how you wrap this up

Ok, would love to see the end of this tale, but to the anony that said the comment about going out by herself, you have obviously never been married. I'm not saying that every woman goes out with the girls, but a lot do and it's OK. Guys do the same thing, usually involving poker or sports bars. Anyhow good work but I do think you should present your version of an ending, that way others coups so wrote alternate endings but we would have yours.

The husband has no problem with his wife going away every weekend to nightclubs? The wife also knew where the date would end. You don't go out in sexy black dress just to talk with a friend.

The problem with confronting her is that the husband will never know if she would have chosen to be faithful had he let the situation play out, and without knowing this will he just blindly trust that she will never do something like this again? Or will he spend the rest of their marriage constantly keeping a watch over her?

It's difficult to comment on a story that is only half finished. Honestly, regardless of how it ends, I don't know how it can be done in an interesting way. Reading about a couple breaking up or trying to reconcile is about as dull as this genre gets, IMHO. I don't see how this story ends in any other way.

I give the author credit for allowing the cheated-upon husband to actually TALK to his wife before she had her affair. All too often in these stories, hubby performs some super secret spy maneuvers to catch the lovers in the act. That plot device was tedious the first time I read it. The problem, though, is that by actually communicating like a real married couple, the author has painted himself into a corner.

One interesting aspect of this story that I find interesting is defining that fine line between faithfulness and infidelity. We can probably all agree that wifey cheated in this story, but at what point? Was it when she had lunch with him? When she danced with him? When she handed him her panties? When she kissed him? When she accepted a date with him? Or has she not cheated yet because they didn't have sex?

No wonder she was ripe for a player.

BTW, Ladies Night Out is way, way too unsafe to happen every week. She is asking for trouble because women frequently get bored by good behavior--and then they get curious with that many opportunities available to them.

Lots of churches offer days out for moms to get a break from being enveloped in their child-rearing role when few male players are out and about, and it's too early to drink heavily. Of course, the lack of drama from those weekday characters means they don't get erotic stories written about them.

I really can't see how a man could trust a lying bitch like her though.

The plot works. Transitions go from one to another. The characters are believable. The situation works.

My quibble, and it is a small one, is 'what exactly do you write for a second part'?

Just Plain Bob, in one of his dick moves, wrote a 3 or 4 part story with excellent characterization and engagement and ended in a similar fashion 'Sign the one sided post nup, or I am gone forever'.

And he left no answer at all, because, as stated, he was being a dick. Because he will NEVER finish that story with the answer.

BUT...he has a point. Once you have the answer, which is essentially one word what ELSE do you write? Now a lot of guys write a wifely POV story which tells us the exact same crap, except we learn exactly what her thinking in and if and how she gave this guy sloppy hand or blow jobs. Which is not NEW material but OLD material.

So I am interested in where you are going. The only viable story is IMO is the recovery phase.

Given her actions and emails, I think her response should be the 100 option. She's obviously done some things she shouldn't have, but nothing that means a death sentence for their marriage.

I enjoyed the story so far. A twist at the confrontation but VERY original. I would recommend having someone proofread / edit the next chapter. Keep up the good work

Girls night out, drinking, dancing makes wife a cheating whore slut.

This woman has no self respect, and not much intelligence. She has formed an emotional bond with another man, giving him all indications through her intimate personal actions (fuck her words) that she has romantic and sexual interest in him. She's wearing her sexy date dress, the one she wears for her husband, for supposedly an innocent dinner?!? By any standard she has already cheated on her husband, and her children. That she may be ignorant of the implications and ramifications of her actions only validates that this woman may be just too stupid to be a loyal competent wife and mother. The question is, what is it about her marriage or herself that has induced her to behave this way? Or has she always been a bit of a bimbo, and Luke was her first real opportunity to engage her slutty persona? When an intelligent woman thinks her husband is neglecting her, she starts lobbying for his attention, continuing to turn up the heat until no other aspect of their life can function or go forward until the issue is addressed. And if he has been neglecting his wife, he must be neglecting the children too, which will only intensify an intelligent wife's insistence that hubby get his attitude corrected or there will be hell to pay. Do I need to point out that an intelligent woman will do all of this Before she starts cheating with other men, in any shape or form? Actually, she won't start fucking around with other men until the divorce is completed, the children are settled, and she finally has time to start considering finding a real mate to replace the asshole who decided he was too busy to be a husband and father.

What we have here is a woman who may have some legitimate grievances, but has gotten the order of redress, out of order. Hubby, children, and marriage first. Fucking around, maybe, as part of replacing a hubby and a marriage that no longer exist. As with any marriage, hubby needs to determine if she's as good as he can do, or is it time to cut her loose and replace her with a better woman. I'm good with whatever he chooses. Maybe she grows up and engages more of her brain, or maybe this will happen again and he will only delay the inevitable break up.

An interesting plot and characters. Thank you for your time and talent. I will wait to score it when I can evaluate the completed work. Good luck with it. And thank you.

The reason they do that is because they can't be babysitting her all the time. They have to be able to trust their partner to do the right thing on her own. If you have to forcefully prevent your wife from cheating, what's going to happen next time if you don't catch her before it happens?

If you're in a relationship where your wife is just going to fuck another man unless you personally put a stop to it each time, you had better have a cuck fetish, be rich enough to afford to have her watched at all times, divorce her, or get ready to start drinking very early in the day.

To the author, congratulations on what has so far been a well-written and interesting first story. I look forward to your conclusion, as well as any contributed by others, such as Javmor79. Thanks for the read.

Cog

I think husband is doing the right thing confronting her. From her texts it sounds like her friend called husband just in time. I think she still loves him and will take hubby to bar and let husband clean his plow good.

Much better than all those stories where, "I thought I'd wait to see how far she would go". This man is real!

I also seem to be about the only reader who is content to let a writer decide when to end his story. What's wrong with suspense, and leaving to the reader's imagination?

Having said that, if another chapter comes along, you can be sure I'll read it.

Well done Ahazura and welcome to this site.

this is an excellent start. You have stirred up the crowd. Well done.

I am looking forward to reading your solution to the dilemma you have created.

imho Bob needs a support team. I am sure romeo will have Sam hovering somewhere nearby with his camera at the ready. And an additional thought regarding Luke, if he and his crew are this blatant among his coworkers he has blackmailed other women before.

yes, I hate predators.

Four star work.

Given the path so far and assuming she hasn't had any type of sex with him, choice 3 is probably more like 75% in reality. Things only got this far because of her choices as an active and willing participant (the pantie thing; the hot kiss in public, the hot little black dress).

May be time for him to find a better wife.

Do we get the rest of the story????? Soon, I hope.

If the author keeps in synch with the Sharon character he created she will opt for the 100% choice. She really wants to maintain the marriage and this option will give her the out she really wants. She needs an excuse to dump Luke and here it is. She doesn't seem to be the kind of woman who will get all indignant over being found out. She's more like the child who really wants to be disciplined. Now that her husband is acting forcefully she'll breath a sigh of relief as she disposes of Luke. Hubby had better keep on his toes in the future. If he drifts away again for work or whatever reason he may have the same problem again. She's vulnerable, but does want to keep the marriage but also needs stroking. A realistic sounding tale. 4*

The 3rd choice really has a disclaimer, "if you haven't slept with him or given or received oral sex". Does that mean if she picks the 3rd choice, all bets are off? Like Annette, i'd love the story continued. A number of hard choices to make. The 3rd choice is really a caveat, if she hadn't given oral to Luke, but Luke says she does, a tough choice on who Bob would believe at this point.

More, more, more, please.

I'll go after Annette. Please, the next chapter!

Ahazura stated at the very beginning that there would be a part two, so what you're upset about is having to click on the story?

Now time for chapter 2. I can't rate this because there's nothing to rate yet. It all depends on her decision. We'll see...

this is a good start, but not a real story

Please write part 2

Sorry didn't mean to step on another commentators baseball analogy. I do love a good writer plying their craft. Where are you taking us. I can't wait. xoxoxo Annette

This isn't a story yet, but it has potential. I'm not invested in BTB etc. , just interested in seeing how it plays out. Don't leave us hanging.

Some logic errors and a husband that isn't that clever or smart. But since it is unclear if this is the finished product I'm not sure how to score it. If this is the first chapter and you're planning on a second chapter to wrap it up, then this is a 3 star effort. If you are expecting another author to write a conclusion or that the readers will decide how it ends in their minds, then it's a 1 for failure to finish.

Much like baseball...waiting for the pay off pitch!

Nice set up, and I wonder what her story is. Hell, it could be legit.

Well, it's fiction, yes?!!

It might be a good idea to have someone check for errors.

Great first story but I hope option two or three they address what she isn't getting from him and the fact that she didn't bring it up. So many stories whether they reconcile or burn the woman just talk about the act not about what precipitated it.

I hope the rest of the story can be read in the next few days. hope to see more from you. Please if you write more, please publish them quickly (Every other day if not every day.

The problem is that Sharon wants something she's not getting from her marriage, and she's not confronting her husband about what her desires are. This could be because what she wants she knows her husband cannot/will not give her, which is permission to act like she's not married. Or maybe she just wants a man to actually act like a husband, who protects her from predators, and if need be protects her from her own stupidity. Its not all her fault.

Let's admit up front that the husband is at least permitting if not encouraging her juvenile slutty behavior. He thinks its OK for his wife and mother of his child to go to nightclubs without him, and get drunk in the bargain? What kind of husband is this? He thinks its OK for her to be socializing and dancing with strange men, and without him even being there to observe her, and their, behavior? He's never heard of women being drugged, kidnapped, raped in the men's room, etc.? Bullshit. Yeah, she's been playing the slut, while he's been playing the dumb shit hasn't got a clue absentee husband. These two losers deserve each other, and they deserve what they do to each other.

So, a pretty good thought provoking story. I hope you continue with a conclusion that is logical and believable based on the characters you have developed up to this point. Good luck with it, and thanks for your time and effort so far.

IMHO, great 1st story with great character buildup. That said, as noted it's your story tell it the way YOU want to tell it. The protagonist is shown to be concerned about his family, an alpha (based on choices), and even concedes much in the third alternative. I have three points: 1.) Being consistent with the storyline, option three (100%) is the only acceptable choice; 2.) with the caveat that she tells the a****** never to contact her again, period; and 3.) the time for action is preemptive, not reactive (unlike so many cocks) - take care of your family. Ta very much for your contribution.

thog4u

You have done well for an initial story in a category that has some excellent writers and some unforgiving critics. Always finish the story and for my preference stay away from the cucks...

In choice three you have him say, "You tell him to never talk or contact you again in front of me." So it's OK for her to contact him behind his back?

Of course not. He should say, "You tell him in front of me to never talk to or contact you again."

So it does matter what order you say things in. Does this make me a grammar nazi? So be it.

I did enjoy the story, and I'm looking forward to the rest. I agree with those who say that you and only you should finish it.

5🌟

Your story was going great, but I don't like how you ended it with him confronting her. I was hoping for more drama to see what would have happened if he didn't confront her. He should have gone to the restaurant in disguise and saw what happened. He didn't give her the chance to prove her true fidelity. Now it's just another predictable ending with them reconciling. Yawn.

Hopefully you, and others, will finish it.

Enough said. Looks like an interesting premise. I may accept your offer for another chapter. Maybe. IG something interesting comes to me and I see that you haven't posted anything else, I may try my hand at it.

We'll see.

Forge ahead and finish the story. *****

But poubic hair was a bit of a laugh, as was him saying tgif was on a thursday, then you really came up with a goody. On the wednesday night you made him say it was so long since he had been home early on A FRIDAY.

this is a bit of nitpicking as overall it was pretty good, but this stuff puts off the reader breaking the illusion. Believe me when I write novels it happens to me, but you need to train yourself to self edit if you dont want to disappoint yourself.

Thanks for the read.