by inkquisitive
What I'd the horror of this??? They didn't run out of coffee. Hope the next part changes dramatically... Will continue to look for the next part...
Don't take my low rating the wrong way. Your writing is quite skilled. You "give good scene". :-)
The story does need some things: First, I need to care about the characters. Second, the twist at the end was nice, but not enough. Third, for sexual horror, it wasn't very sexual or horrifying.
Maybe because I'm a horror maven, but I get this little vignette perfectly. Well written, perfectly paced, and it shows the inherent power imbalance between a dominant and a submissive, and how it is never what it looks like. Thanks!