by Us_Two4play
A waste of time. Nothing really happens. Not even a mention of emotions, let alone erotica
A story? Not-so-much. She beats him for some reason that isn't clear. I think, that in an attempt to be clever, you failed to write a comprehensible story. This was really just awful. No need to post again if this is an example of your work. No stars.
PS - drop the "true story" garbage. You're on a porn site and no one believes a word coming out of your mouths. It does nothing to enhance the storytelling but make us laugh. In fact I'm still laughing at how bad this was!
Clever and fun and the kind of relationship avenue many couples explore at certain points in life.
I can see how it wouldn't appeal, however, to those who masturbate in the bathroom... lol
ignore the recently harsh critics about grammar and structure. I like the more realistic approach you chose. I would love to be in his place! Hope you choose to continue. I gave 4 stars for your realistic senario!
lol...funny...as I was finishing this I was thinking it wouldn't be popular with those who masturbate in the bathroom with the lights off and the doors locked so their spouse won't catch them.
Then I read the comments and can't stop chuckling. Some of you folks are just too predictable
For the author (authors?)...Great story. Super approach. More please
Fun...
Has humour
Has nuance
Has the ring of absolute truth about it...
Not sure what wanking habits have to do with...oh, I see, the slightly complex plotting confuses the tiny minds of those who only have time and imagination for a quick illicit wank!
Got it now...
Write more....clearly many of us want to read this quality of material...