All Comments on 'Inside The Darkness'

This was more like an opening paragraph. And not a good one.

Hey, it was alright, but i noticed a few errors and areas to improve...

1. You said she came again... Yet you didnt tell us about her first orgasm? (Unless i missed it)

2. More details. Who is he? Why did he pick her?

3. That second last paragraph is just weird and doesnt make sense.

So, I agree its a quick story and could use more. However, I think I can answer a few of your questions. The way it comes across to me is she had an online friend that she expressed her deepest and darkest desires too. He simply showed up one day and later his claim to her. As for the "cum again" thing.... I'm gonna guess author error, but who knows? Maybe she was enjoying porn while drinking? Lol

Author, please keep this going. Maybe with some back story, and a continuation of their relationship?