All Comments on 'The Stadium Club 01'

Turning off scores is not a matter of insecurity, Anonymous.

There are authors who pander to their readership and write stories they know will appeal to the maximum number and get a high score. They follow the template laid out several times by SwingerJoe in stories and comments. If there are any authors who are insecure, it is these ones.

Authors who write for themselves don't worry about the scores. I believe they should leave scoring on, because lots of readers like to express their like or dislike of a story (or an author) by their scoring. Just as authors should be allowed their entertainment by submitting a story they like, so readers should be allowed their entertainment by scoring it. (See especially Twistedsickmind's story 'The One Bomber' for the fun that some have by one bombing a story.)

Regarding TrisasHusband's story, I thought it was an interesting though somewhat short introduction to a fantasy situation. It seems rather obvious where it will go from here, but there could be some interesting twists. We wait with interest.

The switch from first-person narration by the husband character to one paragraph of apparent third person part way through the story was disconcerting. Can he read his wife's mind? ("O my god" she thought . . . . .)

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Great start. Can't wait for part 2.

I agree with @ luedon..."Authors who write for themselves don't worry about the scores", but this arises a question: Why would they worry about the comments? I would understand that too...Just like some authors in LW do it...About this story: This is just an introduction to a story...Will we have the whole story? 2* for now

and the first item i noted... the wife has B size breast.. NOT some DD size.. Please continue Nice to see some degree of reality

I think this tale is going to be a wife swap tale. I do not share my wife

and never will. I am not or ever be a chuck

Let's see how it develops.

Love it, need more!!

to offset the asshole of lit's anony's 1 vote

Both the situation and its telling (as also your earlier stories). A form of high art! But with so many implied ellipses, do proof your punctuation -- sometimes what's said and what's thought are confusingly merged.

Compelling characters, and situation...I'm ready for 2!

Interesting situation. Punctuation was an issue, but didn't distract me too much from enjoying the words. Looking forward to part two.

There is a serious POV failure and many typos, etc. but all in all not terrible.

The idea is old and trite but refreshingly presented. Decent effort. I assume the last line will get picked up in the next installment?

Oh, do ignore the personal insults. Write for yourself.

I can see it now. The anonymous comments decrying the cowardice of not allowing scoring go up. Trisha'shusband hovers over the computer screen, finger quivering over the mouse, ready to delete the nasty comments, perhaps occasionally being relieved by Trisha, should he need food or restroom breaks. Scurrying back to maintain vigil over the deletion process.

Why do people become so upset about their comments being deleted? Feel free, good Mr. husband. Of course, allowing comments and then deleting them seems counterintuitive. Ah, well, carry one.

. . . this is prelude or complete, the story could stand as either. I hope it is prelude as the One suffix seems to imply. I can imagine the evening of turmoil going through each partner's mind as he waits and she dances. His thoughts would certainly have a does she - doesn't she aspect, Also the questioning what if she does and she likes the new more than the old, me?

Her attitude would certainly begin with will any other guy want to dance and maybe more with a married woman? Can I keep my husband away from my experience for just a few hours? What if one night just isn't enough? Will I want more? Will my husband let me have more the way he is letting me have tonight? Oh my, what if I change in how I act as wife, I am not really single again. This is just a game.

I hope this story goes on for a while exploring some of these questions. The author has turned off scoring and that is, of course, his/her decision. I would give this full marks for a good and tantalizing beginning.

Why would any couple do this in the first place? Obviously I thought it was a btb story.

2*

Group sex is one thing, but getting PG with an unknown sperm donor? Not believable unless you have a free abortion scheduled.

What serious husband would take his wife to this sex market must have his brains in his cock end. This is not what loving husband and loving wives do.

Where is this going? Seems very vague! What’s the deal with Jill?