All Comments on 'Her Fairy-Tale Life'

I couldn't stop reading. Thank you for an amazing story.

Have they started casting the movie yet?

What an absolutly brilliant story and well told thank you

Reese Witherspoon would be perfect for Magnolia Rose!!! 5-ed and Fave-ed!!!

Kaedan spankin' Magnolia!!! 5-ed!!!

5 stars, as there is no six.

Beautiful retelling of a great Fairy tale. I gave it a 5

Well worth the read. I was worried when I saw it was 19 pages long, but once started to read, could not stop

What a wonderful story.Thoroughly enjoyed it,Many thanks.

Well worth the time. Very enjoyable

This is at least a 6, or 10. I spotted a couple of issues with misused words but I'll try to post later, but this was a remarkable story. Thank you.

A truly lovely story!

Superbly written in so many ways and yet found here among erotica and smut writings. LOL So smooth, kept my attention without a drag anywhere and never became close to boring.

BRAVO!!!!

Yet another rewrite of Cinderella where the evil step-siblings do not have their eyes poked out. Is it really too much to ask to de-disneyfi the story?

Thank you! Very enjoyable... ...please ignore the nit-pickers and nay sayers!

Great story. Very well developed, with many feelings, doubts and humor.

For me it is almost perfect as a Romance story, but it lacks to have developed a little more the final theme of the wedding, I thought that the development was a little short but correct.

5 * for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), is not my native language.

....thanks.

I saw 19 pages and thought, okay. I couldn't stop reading and was disappointed when I read the last page, I wanted more. The story had a good rhythm and flow, interesting characters and it never became confusing for me to follow the story. It was definitely worth the read. A great Valentine's Day story. It's a winner

This is is so wonderful! I was aroused and intrigued and swept away. By far and away the best story in the contest.

What a wonderful story!

Boyd Percy

My new go to story.

Absolutely one of the best stories I've read in a long time

Thanks for writing

You told a wonderful story so well. I loved it.

The only complaint I have is that it ended!

I loved it, you're a great romance novelist

I loved reading this story. Thank you very much for such a great effort. It is very much appreciated.

You've managed to write a truly romantic story, not just a romantic way of relieving lust. Others authors should read your work and emulate your style. I really enjoyed this story and look forward to seeing more from you. Thank you.

Such a romantic re-working of Cinderella Ellie, thank you. As a writer, your stories continue to set you above the rest - no matter which genre you set them in.

Jules

I loved this story! It's worth reading a long story for the detail and character development. It could still use a bit of proofreading, but that's OK. Thank you for sharing it with us!

This story is the perfect Valentines Day story. You are Such a gifted writer, thank you for sharing this one. 5 Stars

Nineteen pages took a while, but it was well worth the time spent reading it.

There are two rather long stories from two of my favourite younger-lady authors competing in the Valentine's Day contest. ChloeTzang and Ellie both have well-crafted stories entered. Totally different, and I would hate to have the job of deciding which deserves the top gong.

This year Ellie reworked one of the classic ugly duckling themes -- Cinderella/Pretty Woman. Maybe next year we can look forward to the other -- Pygmalion/My Fair Lady?

Lue

Ps: Both young lady authors still have random apostrophes creeping in to their plural's. As a somewhat older English language pedant, I always feel the urge to use the purple pencil.

From one Aussie to another; Well Done! This story has been a pleasure to read; pity it lasted only 19 pages.

I' a softie for love and romance. What a romantic story! Well conceived and written. A little long, but kept my interest to finish.

5 *****

I loved her name!

I only have a bit of a concern with how the author handled Elena and Alecks. Paying off Elena was inappropriate for her crime of attempted murder. If they couldn't get Alecks to implicate Elena then they should have gone after Elena for stealing Maggie's inheritance. The courts don't look favourably on executors who steal from trusts. Hannah should have arrange a little accident for Elena.

After Lue mentioned.my name I just had to read this. Started and couldn't stop. Its just such a lovely romance with all the drama and suspense. Its a beautiful story Xellie. Better than most of the romances Harlequin puts out IMHO. You got my 5 stars.

Lovely story. Thank you. 5*

you are the best on here love this story please more I miss reading your story I be looking

Another great couple and story of how they come together.

It's a Very Long story, but a damned good read.

You handle multiple speakers and multiple events with class & skill, leaving few loose ends (I'd like to have heard the evil step-Mum be suspended for a year or two).

Thank you for a bloody good story.

HP

Very enjoyable story, including the "Everything" hinted at earlier. Good stuff worthy of every star going.

good luck in the contest

I just wish she had a higher regard for herself, better self esteem. It was a bit of a downer happening so often. Would also like to have known what ultimately happened to the ugly step family.

I know it's hard to continue series but please !! More doll collector and cally, we are dying waiting for more

Loved the story and would like to see another chapter. I would like to see what happens to the step family, do they have kids, what does she say about the ore, how does the wedding turn out, do they rebuild the house at the farm? Great story.

Amazing! Loved every second of it. Hope we get some more chapters! Would love to read what happened after the wedding and a little on their married life.

What an amazing love story for Valentine's Day! You have had me reading this from start to finish all today as I couldn't bear to put it down. You get 5 *'s and more, with the hope you win this contest! This is the perfect story! I fav this and you. And I fell in love with them both, laughed and cried for them finishing with the biggest smile as it all came together. Please keep writing!! Thank you!!

This should definitely win the prize for Valentine's Day. This is my first story of yours that I read. I'm going to have to go back and read the rest of them. Thank you for writing such as well constructed story. The characters were believable and lovable, except of course for the in-laws.

Can't stand this monumental pet peeve that is so common in American English.

"Try *and* get some sleep." Or "Try *to* get some sleep."

Try should be followed by "to" when naming the action. What are you going to try to do? I'm going to try to sleep.

"It is better to try and fail than not to try and fail."

In this example, the action is left blank or open because the action referred to is putting forth effort. What are you going to try to do? Well you're not going to try to fail. You're going to try, put some effort into it. Try to pass the test, try to kiss that girl, try to have some fun, try to be a better writer. It is better to try to do those things and fail anyway than to not try at all and still fail. Two separate actions...trying at something, failing at something.

But you are not going to try at something and sleep.

Get It?

Well drawn characters, a cracking plot, bags of romance and just enough sex to keep it real.

Thoroughly enjoyed it. (Oh...and would the grammar nazis PLEASE get a life!!!?)

Brilliant.

Emotional through the whole damn thing.

Amazing writing. Thank you for sharing your gift

Beautiful story and characters. I love Maggie, she is a relatable woman.

Great story! One of the best I've read. Ignore the grammar comments. just stupidity....

Thank you so much, everyone, who voted and commented I am so excited. I appreciate you all even the grammar nazi's who make me think about how I write.

SWEET couldn't put I down 5*****

You had me hooked from the beginning. I couldn't stop. Incredible in every way. You have an amazing talent. One of the best stories I have ever read, anywhere. You MUST keep sharing your talent with us. Thank you for this story. Just perfect. Nobel Prize for Valentine's Day stories.

WOWWOWWOW

An amazing, compelling story. I couldn't stop reading once I started. Congratulations on your contest-winning story! :)

I was so enraptured by these characters and the setting. It really was a re-telling of Cinderella, but with such a modern twist. I know the story has been done in many forms but I want to see this as a movie! Movie! Movie!

Congratulations on the win, you deserve it!

Good Story, but I HATE reading 18 pages of repetetive, often aggrevating buildup and a rushed 2 paragraphs of conclusion. Especially since it's obvious the author had absolutely no idea where to to take the story or how to end it in a satisfying way that honored the characters and the readers.

I can't believe this won best Valentine Story!!!

Ab

I was captured from the beginning. I wish there was much more of an ending. There are so many possibilities to make the story even more memorable and complete.

Great Story!!

It is very, very rare these days that I will sit up all night reading an online story but you had me captivated from the beginning of the first page. Perhaps, youve even made me believe, if only for a moment, in true love again.

Please, don't stop writing, ever.

<3

You nailed this one! I was captivated from beginning to end! You danced the line so beautifully between letting both lovers have an equal value to their roles in the relationship! It's a refreshing read after so many stories that have one or the other's role overpowered by the other's! You also let us ladies be romanced at the same time as valued for who we are! I can't stop using exclamation points as I loved every aspect of this story! I don't want you include any spoilers because I want everyone to enjoy the twists and turns of this one on its own merits! All I can say is thank you for putting forth the time and effort to produce a piece that I thoroughly enjoyed reading! Okay! No more exclamation points after this one! Thanks!!! (Okay I lied...just one more...really though, I enjoyed this thoroughly and would totally buy it if it were a book!)

A truly loving erotic thriller that is a must read for everyone, especially those of us that dream of this very fairy tale.

I read the whole story in a single sitting. (By the way, it wasn't too long.) It had everything. The evil step-monster and family. The struggle to save the farm. The sudden appearance of Prince Charming, including his over-the-top family. The muddled romance and finally the Happily Ever After wedding. You are a very talented writer.

JudyLee

No doubt about it. You can, and did, write one great romantic story. Thanks for sharing with us.

This story had me from the beginning. I really felt Maggie's pain from everything she had endured from her horrible family to the massive doubts she had regarding Kaedan's love for her. I cried several times reading this, especially when Maggie felt she just wasn't good enough for Kaedan and his family. That just really hit home for me and helped me to identify with her. We all want to feel like we are good enough, especially when someone enters your life who is so different from you. I wish the story would have at least brought us through the wedding ceremony. We stuck with you for the whole story, so I think we deserved to be a part of the nuptials. Despite that, I loved the story and wish there were more chapters!

I have no problem with 19 pages of writing, but this is too long winded. I won't vote, because I couldn't finish and since people enjoy your writing - and that is the main thing and I won't take that aspect of your ability away from you - learn to condense.

Congrats on winning the Valentine's Day Writing contest. Well deserved. You are a gifted writer and I am always happy to see new tales from you.

I loved the story. It was an easy read with everything flowing. I could quite see it as a series of paperbacks that I would devour on vacation down the shore, with a book in the series being how each sibling met and married. Only thing, I don't see where his mom ever answered the question of his unusual name but that is just me really liking to know more about the name.

I absolutely loved this story you see about getting in published outside of this site I would so follow you as a romance author your writing is up there with some of my favorite authors so pls continue writing more stories like this one<3<3<3<3

Loved it.

Great story

The best love story ever

Elegant and filled with down-to-earth romance. This is the best story I have read and it oozes with professionalism. I loved it. Please keep up the good work.

Glad you were able to inject a lot of love into your Valentine story, while still keeping it fun and suspenseful. Well done.

Charming romantic and enough bitter sweet to keep it real. A proper pleasure and a considerable achievement. Thank you.

This story is a wonderful combination of romance humor and drama.

If I could afford it, I'd buy the movie rights.

People, who would you cast in the leading roles?

Just north of Brisbane... that is some of the most beautiful countryside around.

And it just goes with the lovely story your have woven. Thank you for allowing us to share in it.

This is romance at its very finest. I enjoyed every second of reading this story, great characters, a fantastic world brought to life and a brilliant modern telling of a classic fairy tale. This story is on par with the works of DreamCloud as far as romance goes and he's the best I've ever read.

Wonderful writing and a great story line. You took one of the oldest stories in modern day fiction and put your own theme on it to make it a story well worth reading. I hope you are still writing these stories and that you consider writing novels. Nice to see that someone can write something with a happy ending.

The lead character in these cinderella stories or cinderella inspired stories are always so stupid. In one way you show them as strong and independent and the other she's easily manipulated by her family, It's just annoys the crap out of me

The story is fine I guess, but there's a lot of spelling issues "you're" instead of "your". The Main character Is annoying, she tries so hard to be strong, but she's actually pretty weak. If I were the guy i'd be pretty fucking tired of having todo BEG this idiot yo he with me, she always seems to find a problem.

Learn the difference between 'you're' and 'your', also its 'groin' not 'groyne'. It's far too long and Maggie has to be one of the most annoying characters I've ever read.

Groyne is a British variant of groin, chief. Just go with it and the overuse of the letter U. The bad part of the story is the focus on the Disney version. In the original version the step siblings each lost part of a foot and were both blinded in pigeon attacks.

You author can write. Write that book I'll help spread the work bout how good you are. jgstansell@yahoo.com

You did a great job on this story. Don't let anyone get you down about it. It had all the parts needed for a great little romance and you should be proud! I would have been happy to help with proofreading/editing although I don't know what it takes to do that on the site. I've read many novels by professionals that had editing errors also. Be proud and best of luck in your future endeavors!

bhosdike har acchi chiz ko kharab kar dete ho. itna to accha likha hai kya problem hai agar do char spelling idhar ushar ho gai to. acchi chiz padho aur khush raho na. isn't it more important tht a person is making u feel happy, rather than pointing out silly spell checks. fuddu saley,

I thought it was a very nice story. Maybe just a little long for my taste, but a very good

and well written story. And I think that people who read these stories and are more concerned with the spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc, are not lovers of the short story, they are just haters looking for a nit to pick.

5 Stars, no doubt.

I was hooked. Lovely romance.

This is amazing!!! Please write more like this. I was hooked!Keep up the fantastic work

Reading this story reminded me of Ever After with Drew Barrymore as "Cinderella" and Anjelica Huston as the evil stepmother. The relevant cultural references were a plus and I especially loved the reference to Deadpool (my favourite wise cracking superhero). Although long this is one of the most enjoyable stories I've read on this site.

Beautifully written story!

This is one off the best story's i've ever read here on L in faciterotica if i could give it a 10 star rating i would in fact i would give it a 20

It's such a beautiful romantic story!

This was such a beautiful story filled with so much love. I couldn't stop reading it once I started - you had me hooked from the beginning.

I have read this and re-read it and each time is grabs my heart and i cry. stunning, in the list of stories the is the best i have ever read. thank you, if you get the chance please continue it, would love to hear an entire life story like this

Second time reading. As good as the first. 🏆

Wow so good. I did not want it to end. I liked the way you made up the characters.

One of the best stories i have read here. Good work.

A wonderful example of how a story can be

Second time reading this and I still enjoyed the tale. Would have given you a 10 but sadly literotica only has a maximum of 5