by InnerDarkness
is rather ambiguous, but that makes this poem especially applicable to anyone's pain. You did a good job expresing yourself, but I think you could sharpen this a bit and make it better :)
...only can come when one doesn't rise above and move on..or try again.
you could squeeze a great deal out of this and sharpen up what you're trying to say.
just a thought..but a nice read ty!
This could be excellent but needs work.
Go back to the drawing board.
Where's your inspiration? You need to get some or a person to inspire you.
Liked the over all transition from one of doubt and dispair to hope of a new chance to live. Warm smiles nice.
It is like a rational discussion of pain and suffering
Or like a dissertation;
The words are there but they convey no feeling
And when reading's done the feeling is, "So what."
After a particularily harrowing time ~ Experiencing the joys of a new beginning.
It’s Ok to fail just as long as we learn from our mistakes. After all I’m not sure if this fits but, Rome wasn’t built in a day.