by slutgore
Not so much "Cumdump" but CUM-DUMB. Sorry, Slopbore. You don't have it.
The writing's fairly good so I don't get the negative comment, but this is a good working basis, more of an incomplete chapter than a short story.
The pace is good too, but I'd enjoy some more detail, a more grafic array of emotions in the sex scene and a more elaborate end.
I enjoyed it but I would really like your work much better if you give yourself more time to dig into it.
Hope to see more of your work soon.
Why can't something like this ever happen to me? I could simply love him all over! I so want to!
Roxanne
Interesting story, I feel that it has a lot of potential. I would love to know what happens next to them. Do they start to date or will Dakota continue to be taken roughly?
Good story idea...I love reading about crossdressers getting face fucked...Need part 2...