by WildDaisy85
This was not long enough . Needed to have some type of sex or teasing involving the other person. Make the next chapter longer before you lose readers
A great start - I enjoyed your wordplay, but it left me lacking because while the tension was solid, there was no payoff. And unless you have part two ready to go and it will appear tomorrow, I will have long forgotten your character before it gets posted. You are not writing this as a flash story, but as a longer one, so you need to give us more so that we invest into it. I would have liked to see at least double this length.
I too am a married CD and my wife doesn't know. I'm not into the bondage but otherwise the rest of the story really turns me on. I would love to have someone like my sister-in-law (or my sexy neighbour or my wife's best friend) find me and discover my secret. I would become their bitch and they would be my mistress. I can't wait to read the next chapters. This was a great start.
Lock the doors. But now that his secret is out, time for a divorce. Dumber than a stump.
1 star
An excellent intro story! The series has huge potential, and your writing style has me itching to look for a next chapter.