All Comments on 'American Holiday Hottie'

Good story, although quite brief. You should get an editor. There were a lot of punctuation errors.

Who cares about punctuation errors, stuff like this is worst: he unzips his flies. His pants have 2 or more zippers?

I can't believe that you're so concerned over the analytical grammar and wording of this story. This story is meant to get you off. Use your imagination, this is just a great holiday memory for me ;-)