All Comments on 'Haiku: Mutual Masturbation'

1st one, you have 5-7-6, just to see if we're paying attention?

Nice catch. I need an editor. :)

While not a traditional haiku, I like it!

By the by, you got your count right the first time.

Claiming a three line verse is not a haiku if it’s not written in 5-7-5 syllables, is like saying it’s not a poem unless it rhymes.

A better way to think of a haiku, IMHO, is that it’s three lines of poetry, the first two setting a scene, and the third line giving a surprise ending, which seems unrelated to the first two lines but on reflection gives unexpected insight into them.

Here’s my example

“I can multitask” haiku:

I suck a hard one

and swallow the salty cum

both while chewing gum.

very well done!

Interesting. This is the first time I have come across a possible typo where I'm not sure:

I wake, my cock soft

You like naked beside me.

Always exciting

You like naked beside me or You lie naked beside me

Either way, Interesting

THANKS