All Comments on 'Unaware Her Bikini Came Untied'

Just because English might not be your primary language shouldn't stop you from writing. It just means that you need a good editor. There were so many word and grammatical errors that you obviously don't use an editing program either.

Simply put, the many mistakes detract from your story. Good luck for the future. Cheers.

Many of your errors seem to be typos. Reread your story after 24 hours and you should be able to spot these errors and correct them. They do detract from the reader's enjoyment of an otherwise good story.

Kaka.

A kernel of creativity, but so many more things you could have done....How was a reader to know that "we" meant you and your WIFE?? "push" does not mean "bush" and on, and on..... above all, GET A PROOF READER!!

I’m by no means a writer and you are all right, I should proofread and even better get a proofreader. That’s what I was hoping to find here. I have a ton of true stories about her being exposed and embarrassed and most with pictures. I start writing and so many things come at once I can’t organize them.

I appreciate the feedback and hope you enjoy them despite the errors

Who was she and what relation to you? Husband Wife? Coach to student athlete? BF and GF? Cute little story but lacked some things that could have made it more interesting. As it stands now it was not a bit exciting.

Where's the pictures on here?

Mostly in long past years, my husband used to do stuff like that to me. Every time I'd be mad, humiliated, frustrated, embarrassed and afraid. The funny thing is, looking back at them, they are good and arousing memories for me. I think that is why I like to read about these things happening to others

I don't know why your rating was so low

Was she shaved?

...with the other commenters abou t your grammar and spelling errors, but please do NOT let that keep you from submitting more stories to Literotica.com, as I was swept up in your tale of sneaky and unrequested exhibitionism. Would that my wife was that thin that other men would enjoy the slight of her rotund flesh a much as I do!

YOMEYO

Concept was good, but the grammar made it hard to stay immersed. Would still be interested in more from you, just proof read the next one or have someone edit for mistakes and you'll ne golden

great tale of exposure! Thank you!

Way too many typos and bad grammar. I couldn’t finish the story. No one ever proofreads their stories. Spell check doesn’t fix grammar. 6th grade English does.