All Comments on 'Wouldn't It Be Fun?'

Trash

Not just trash, but it stinks like 3 day old trash.

I like it. Nice use of hypnosis and a fun trigger. I especially like how Emma's playing dress up with daisy I hope more fun outfits are instore. I'm a bit confused why Emma wants to ruin Daisy's life. At first it seemed like she was having fun (cheerleading and new clothes) but now things seem malicious (fucking random biker guy). They seem to be roommates and must have been friends why the hate?

I would suggest maybe having biker guy be a friend to Emma who's secretly been wanting daisy for a while.

Idk why that other person is being rude. it's a nice little story

Thank you for the critique! Actually, that's a great idea about the friend thing, I'm gonna steal that from you!

Even under hypnosis a person will not do anything they morally object o.