All Comments on 'Zombie Apocalypse in Somalia'

Obviously this needs further chapters to reach a resolution.

Another swing and miss.

Research, Spammy. That is what you are missing and not understanding even the basic things about writing. Itfeels like you dropping writing promts into a AI and letting it do its thing. Like military ranks used with the name almost every time a character. Is mentioned. As readers we do not care about their rank, skin color or hieght unless it is relivant to the story. It is how the character is working in the world. The only reason I could think to include it all the time is to pad your word count.

After 3000 writing promts you should know at least the basics.