by AzanianHeat
It doesn't hold together for me, but there's too much good in it not to give it a five.
This fit into the story so perfectly. I imagine you wrote it specifically for that purpose? It could also stand alone, though....
Keep up the good work!
And I will give full credit but I want to read this with my wedding vows, not that I'm gettin married anytime soon lol. I shed a tear for its beauty.
Shire
Firstly: thanks for the votes and kind words.
Next: Shire, the poem is all yours for your future wedding, lol - I'll be there in spirit.
And, lastly: Yes, this poem was written to go with the story, "I Know What I'm Doing" - but also intended to work as a stand-alone. I'm no poet, but I am an emotional being and hope that, at the very least, that came through. Again, thank you.
Blessings,
AH
wow, that was just beautiful and emotional. i hope i know a love like that someday.
This poem is beautiful.
I don't even know what to say, except that it is marvelously incredible.
You may claim not to be a poet, but the words speak for themselves.
Net Mooi
beautiful. just beautiful. is complicated to enjoy another language, and even more in a poem, but I really like it.
I just finished reading I know what I'm doing, and I was so happy about to share the seasons (you know, that thing of snow in christmas doesn't work in this part of the planet, here we eat watermellon and go to the beach instead). that was a very good story, so tender, and the plot was interesting, all I wanted to know was More, more, more. Love the weird pair of Js that speak in half sentences that the other finishes!!!
congratulations, your work is very good. keep writting, please.
greetings from Chile.
I loved the poem so much that I am hoping that you will let me use it in my wedding as part of my vows. If not I will understand, but a love that is like theirs is close to my love for my own mate. So please say yes...please.
Asymbii
Oh my god, that was beautiful! Love Ethan and Aiden's story, you're such an amazing writer
This made my heart ache and feel with emotion it brought tears to my eyes.
Softly
Sweetly
Tears drip from my lashes
I know love
And I know passion
Thank you for the poem of heart
I will never forget it
As my eyes close and dream
Thinking of love and sweet embraces
And little kisses
I feel so alone
With not a warm body pressed close at night
But this poem brings me hope
For a future
Thank you.
For now I can finally cope.
And sleep
Sweetly
Softly
In the air of the night