by jerseyblue
CONGRATULATIONS. I Thoroughly enjoyed all 22 chapters. My suggestion for future submissions is to get an editor to proof read for grammar and word choice. (I will be happy to assist, if you don't have someone else in mind.) It's distracting from an otherwise riveting narrative to see wrong tenses or improper pronoun usage. Amy, Hank and Jesse are well developed characters; Joe and Roger left a little something to be desired. Thanks for a good read.