All Comments on 'If You Take it All Away'

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I liked what The Man said to her at the end, "Never believe you are not worth loving. The World is not such a fucked up pit that we can't dig our way out of it."

We all want the Tony's of this world to meet their end this way, I think.

A cold ass story damn that was good!! Thanks for sharing

Finally, a story of yours that I didn't like. Too dark and too preposterous for me. I haven't tried to price, but I have a hard time believing the actress/model would have had the cash to pay to have the guy kidnapped, smuggled out of the country and into another, bribe the prison officials and have the prison wired for video.

No one bats 1.000 but I think this still puts you around .950

this was under the wrong heading. Don't they have one for "Brutality/murder"? That's where this dark tale belonged. No fun or entertainment in reading this sorry tale.

Revenge is best served cold. It's supposed to be dark & disturbing, otherwise it's not revenge...

This is what all revenge stories should be; cold, calculated, and precise. While there could have been a little bit more description on how The Man (It's Taylor Eden, right?) caught Tony, maybe a little back story on Valerie, ultimately they weren't necessary to making this a good story.

The end, and by that I mean those last two glorious paragraphs, was just perfect. I absolutely love the part where Tony's hopes for freedom and vengeance are shattered under the abuse of the inmates. I've always loved stories where the protagonist crushes the spirit of the one who wronged him, but I rarely find one as well done as this.

At the time of this comment, I'll have read 90-95% of your submissions(didn't read the TG pieces, as they don't really do anything for me, entertainment-wise), and I must say, I love almost all of it. Consistently, you have proven to be one of -if not the- best writers on this site by a significant margin, and I check three or four times a week for a new submission.

I hope to read more from you soon.

This was a tough story to write. It was inspired by a story here where a woman is caught in a bad situation and the sleazy bag 'friend' promises "one more time and you'll be out" and keep destroying her reputation and life - in the end she simple goes along with the scumbag and makes money and is okay with things. I didn't like that ending so I wrote another one.

I wrote this in a minimal way to emphasized Tony's final fate and what Taylor tells Valarie at the end.

The minimalist style of this story was brilliant. It would have been weaker if longer.

Places like that run on corruption. He would have found a way to get the cuffs off and then get away. Money finds a way. The death tape was like so many before it. Fake. I'd like a second chapter where he escapes and then gets HIS revenge. Otherwise this is just unimaginative drivel.

I have been reading some of your longer stories and thought I had a good idea of what you would write. This is so much different than that, I really wondered if I was reading someone else's story. Yes, it's dark. Yes, it's a flash story. But you probably have more in this short story than I read in others detailed, long stories. I can get a sense of each character's personality, history, and what makes them feel like more than just words on paper. And that is because I have invested into the story. For a short, to the point, little as possible details story... that is awesome! Thank you!

I would like to think I have not been left untouched by many of the hours I have witnessed from a distance, been allowed to share in the retelling of and read elsewhere. Sometimes that leave a bit of the Monster in us all.

I am also a firm believer you do not take revenge for the Fallen. You take revenge for the victims who might come later. Too often revenge takes a piece of a person's soul so your efforts are better spent taking care of the Living. Also, when you forgive, never forget you are letting go of that hate and pain within you along with releasing another from what wickedness they did. Never forget to save yourself.

James aka FinalStand

"Never believe you are not worth loving. The World is not such a fucked up pit that we can't dig our way out of it."

One point of the story was vengeance is too often empty. More so, it was this ~ to find it in yourself to love yourself once more after a vile thing has been done to you.

Sometimes people need to let go of the bad things which have happened in their lives, to let themselves heal and recover ... and sometimes it helps to know your tormentor is never going to come back and do what they did to you, or anyone else, ever again.

This was my intent anyway,

James aka FinalStand

PS: Yes, this is a Taylor Eden tale.

I was molested as a child. What a fitting ending to someone who did this. Thank you.

We're literally strangers to you.

... it is okay. She isn't giving away any vital piece of contact information. If any of my tales help others in a small way, I'm not adverse to them letting me know. If I thought they were at risk, I'd delete the comment myself, but thank you for your concern.

Take care,

James aka FinalStand

Sometimes telling a dark secret is cathartic while still remaining anonymous. I applaud her for letting it go. And to the point above about a woman not having enough money to pay for this venture, the confirmation that it is indeed Taylor Eden is all that is needed. James, I hope you are doing well and getting healthy your talent is immense but your life and you and your families lives are so much more. Do you write under any other pseudonym? I saw a story on here (literotica) that was so familiar. Just wondering.

I do not write under a pseudonym here, or anywhere else. I have published a few works under my real name - James M. Dosher. What story are you talking about?

James aka FinalStand