by slevinous
Why the fuck do you ask to finish it? If you wrote what you have, then you should have finished to begin with. Dumbass.
I look forward to your continuing even as I continue my own version which evolves to have daughter - mother, daughter - friend, daughter and friend's parents, parents and parents, you get the idea. I like a story that leave lots of room for my own imagination. Thanks for sharing.
I must note to you that the person who used the "dumbass" reference in another reply was an anonymous non member. Please do continue with the story. In fact I will anxiously watch for its posting. I love the reality which is incorporated from the very basic descriptors you've used to tantalize your readers making us salivate for more.
Please be sure to edit well, I enjoy the fact that this reads well because du diligence was paid to it.
Please do finish, I feel the reality as I live the story. I do have to say I'm a daughter and I can't help but think of my father. Please continue and make me - I mean- it more juice.
That's "aside from the spelling". When you don't put the spelling aside, there's a lot of room for improvement. Assuming you continue this story with more chapters, take the time to proof-read them. (In more simple terms: read your shit, slowly, and more than once, to make sure you don't have lines like "My Daughter has a best friend in high school named Aubrey, she took a knock out." I mean, what the hell did you mean to say there?)
When people come to this site to read, and have to take time out from reading (and masturbating, more than likely), to puzzle over what the author might have meant when the text gets all confusing... well, let's just say ...you're going to lose their 'attention'. Know what I mean?
You posted this, then now you ask for permission to see if it is ok to continue, GEEZ *FACEPALM* you need to grow a set before doing something like this, and don't leave the rest of these people waiting. Just write the rest of the story for them ok. Once you start something like this you don't leave people hanging here so continue on with the rest of the story.
"This was a very tight pussy indeed, but I was against something, something forward." The head of your cock was already in and you felt something forward? Really? Get real, you already went through the opening where the hymen would be encountered. Perhaps she had a tampon in blocking you? There isn't a magical cherry inside her somewhere, you may have stretched a membrane on the way in. Quite possibly, the membrane could tear a little during first time sex. Half the time the damn thing ruptures for no real reason. The other half is the hymen doesn't get fully torn away until vaginal child birth. My lecture is over; get to know the body you write about.
RS
Please continue this story. FOLLOW ALL advise for correcting your spelling and grammer. I do enjoy a good incest story but I hate the ones that are poorly written.
I'm so tired of clueless writing. If you're going to write about the hymen at least have an idea where it is. Google might be a good place to start.
Man, you can't get that far and then leave us hanging...that's just teasing us
Never had sex with a virgin have you? Learn where the fucking hymen is, for fucks sake it is not something that gets bumped into when you're already inside even if it is just an inch, what the fuck is it with all the writers on this site insisting it's inside the vagina and gets bumped into then torn through? Hell maybe you're really virgin yourself making up this bullshit story. Has to be a male writing this shit, a woman would know where the hymen is.
Please don't continue to write any of this drivel until you learn how to proof read, and what an editor is. Also try to make the "facts" of the story believable unless you are writing science fiction.
Good start, now stop fucking with the readers and finish the story!
for the folks bashing about the location of the hymen, think about this...no two vaginas are the same. True, the hymen is located AT THE ENTRANCE to the vagina, however, that entrance is just a little past both sets of lips. Since no two are alike, this entrance can be closer or further in. It is fully possible to have a inch of dick in and then bump it, since the first inch is usually just the head.
Enjoyed your story, but would like to read about the rest with plenty of details.
Come on thats not even a question!! You better finish it!! <3
Finish it. This is so hot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Finish. Please?!?!?!?!?! :)
Hey... You gotta write some more, PLEASE!!!
this is a pretty good story with the right/proper twists to make it interesting and
make me wanna do _________________ & _________________!! (and make me wish I was the main character ready to fuck a certain somebody, after fucking all the other certain somebodies... and all the others you will write about in future chapters...
as for some of the small details, so what?... as long as you write with proper grammar, proper word usage (there/their, waste/waist. etc...), with some spell checking tossed in, I'm ready for more!!!
thanks for an exciting story!
This combination of erotic snipets of your love/fantasy life is well written. However, you are all over the board with your aim. If flush out each of the paragraphs in this written essay you will have a great group of starts here.
It is quite annoying to we the readers to have a great first page of a story only to turn the page and see a note from the author saying, 'If there is any interest in reading the rest of the story, let me know.' If we weren't interested in the story line from the title, we probably wouldn't have started reading it in the first place.
Yes please finish each of the stories started here. I understand we will have to look for you as the author, as the stories will be in a number of categorieson this great erotic story site.
Overall I loved the story so far but please continue and finish the story
Please continue. Please include the son fucking his mom and afterwards the whole family fucks with Bree and her family too. Please include sniffing musky panties and musky pussy.
Not only should he introduce her to the pleasure of sex, once they are done, Aubrey should join them and give Cassie a second orgasm... father would have time to go again in not time.
BUTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT --->---> the moment
thing said *` all the steamy details not going just yet `* i've stopped
with reading ... ... it's now about few,,yrs. stillllllllllllllllllllllllllll no continuations
SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO i'm not gonna finish
with reading least not the moment I'M ALSO not gonna bother with give grade
This story got me really hot and bothered. You should really continue this story
Please proof read or use a spellchecker. This is full of really basic errors.