All Comments on 'Candy Apple Red'

Looks like it's going 60 standing still. I don't follow a lot of what you write (the connections) but it's always interesting

Really tightly rendered and is it a car, a metaphor? It's just really good. You do amazing things with word plays.

I love what you did with the language, but I didn't get the car connection until reading the other comments. That's because I am clueless about anything on wheels, however.

The last stanza: it took me four reads to get it. the Pa Moll in capitalized letters made me think of Pall Mall cigarettes. If it were not capitalized, that would help.

Is that idiotic? Sorry if so.

This put a smile on my face. The second stanza, especially. I don't know why, but that tickles me quite a bit.

Compulsive editor that I am of my poems, an additional new 4th stanza on my hard drive reads:

I say to Jack "my thinking was this:

moonlight drives in the country,

a little air freshener perhaps,

and a blanket in the back"

for more than A-B

and everyone's a critic

and never mind the specks, they'll come out in the polishin'. i know that colour; it's all about the speeeeed, though she may buck a little.