All Comments on 'Dead End # 2'

the last hot spot of derelection, TK U MLJ LV NV

It works as an extended image but also as a larger observation about the effect of disuse and indifference. The only word I'd nitpick is "pollution" simply because the rest of the poem is so metaphoric and this very specific word seems to not quite fit in. But that's just my opinion, and overall I found this to be a wonderful and moving piece of writing. Thanks for sharing it.

I basically agree with Angeline but a couple of minor additional suggestions. Possibly drop "possibly" from second verse. I'd stick to one tense in verse 4 and say, damp rises, rather than "there's damp rising." In the last verse the last couple of lines might have a bit more punch if you dropped the conjunction and threw in a couple of commas - cold, indifferent, vile. But really I'm quibbling - Good effort for 5.

I find this to be a frightening description, perhaps of the rotting heart of an inner city. It is very unsettling...which means your images have done their job!