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by EroticOrogeny

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WickedEveWickedEvealmost 15 years ago
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Hmm... how about changing lines 3 and 4:

<br>medicine cabinet

<br>childproof cap, fingers fumble

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<br><br>I'd make those simple changes since your poem already implies that the cap won't budge. <br>And there's no need to <br>spoon feed the reader "asprin." :)

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