All Comments on 'Hold Me'

by EmeliaBell

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AmyfriendAmyfriendabout 17 years ago
Very romantic...

with such sweet words. Nicely done.

LeBrozLeBrozabout 17 years ago
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A nice soft romantice feel to this piece.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Good

Good but this could be better

The imagery could be more bold and sharper, the scene that you have created sounds a little saccharine and cliched. Perhaps using similes and more vivid images would help this

The mood that you have created is, however, spot on

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Emelia Bell is an author whose voice, both written and spoken, is uniquely English. She writes intense and steamy stories with strong characters and plots and mind-blowing sex scenes. If your taste runs to the Anglophiliac and you appreciate a plot-driven stroke story then E...