All Comments on 'I shall have you'

the servicemans uniform is sacrosanct, TK U MLJ LV NV

5ed,

liked the teeth

god what an animal

A sailin'

to an H we go

Really?

Defend.

I did not vote, but question, I see one comment, one reply. tell me why.

Chipbutty - thanks, great suggestion. You are right, I don't need the teeth. But I have such nice sharp teeth it's hard to resist adding them in...(smile). Your suggestions are most appreciated, as always.

the sounds delight my ear, the images my mind, the language my spirit...

I shall swallow you in luscious words

unleash a tide of doubt

bite off brass buttons

breathe desire into the band of your briefs

cup what you have protected

secure perimeters with evasive action

I shall sow your hips with my need

engrave your ribs with my tongue

there's originality of phrasing that can't but help appeal, and a lone quibble of do you need 'with my teeth'? if you want to keep 'teeth' for its aural links, perhaps something like 'bite off brass buttons with teeth ignoring pleas for amnesty' ?