by SeattleRain
Loved this write SR,
very sensual and erotic.
You make writing look
so easy and effortless.
Really enjoyed this piece.
Nice work hun,
~ JC
Rather nice, as expected, but I am confused be two "you"s. The first wants an "r" I think, and the second an "'re" or at least a comma does it not?
"for you attentions."
"You my always untouchable "
could you change the words, a little and sing it to me, maybe it's me, the un's seem to undulate and make it unforgetable
want to be in 20 degree weather, to chill this HEAT ... *winks*.... this is by far a most splendid performance of writing and thoughts, and prevoking thoughts.. and touching thoughts, O' my, I do believe it is hot in here.. I loved it ... every line, and it is un.for.get.a.ble. sweetest peaches to ya'.. sGp
This is a good topic, men claim they would love to be women and would be sluts <grin> and then women want to be men...well that's your poem <grin> I enjoyed your write.
Powerful, lean, rich, and evocative. Very fine work.
I crave the opiate of your breath
that has brought strong men trembling
for you attentions. I want to feed
and feast upon your addictions.
*****
nice piece seattle......don