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todski28over 9 years agoCall me
hmm, not as good as others of yours I have read but still enjoyed this,
could maybe have played on the use of fingers to dial numbers instead of sensitized, just a thought :)
and I think the repetition of breaths and breath so close together could be switched to help your flow, gave you a 4
Trixareforkidsover 9 years agoI like this one
Right up until the last stanza. I think it would be stronger without it.
But regardless, the beginning is very good and forms a clear image.
Nice piece.
SkinandSinover 9 years agoAuthorThank you!
It is actually an old one I rediscovered among my typewritten notes (dating myself, I know, but, hey!).
HoneyAdoredover 9 years agoA good beginning
...I am with Trix on this one, not so sure about the ending, but the start drew me in
Nice :-)
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What I write is purely fiction, merely an exploration of my mind's small, dark crevasses - whatever genre I choose is not a nod of consent for the events or character motivations contained in my work. Call it an outlet, call it my imagined perversions, call it what you will. I...
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