All Comments on 'It happened on the night bus'

Very enjoyable. A little too long, though. The first 4 strophes give the reader a great story and could even be a complete poem. There are too many unneeded words after "progressed to more intimate matters." Leaves some things to the imagination and do more showing than telling. Still a good poem and it will be mentioned on the literotica poetry forum.

with one who will never re-meet, TK U MLJ LV NV