All Comments on 'It's Friday Night For All Of Us'

hi, pelegrino :)

a sweetly wistful, old-romantic tone to this piece that does feel as if it's quite musical in nature.

Since you're using punctuation, it might be tightened up - for example, there are places a semi-colon would be better, and places you can drop the commas altogether, allowing the line-break to serve for that small pause a comma would lengthen too much.

so, where you have this kind of layout:

Perhaps this nothing that I've got,

Is everything that I deserve,

In vicious circles to be caught,

Sometimes even to lose my nerve.

I watch the candidate full moon,

From my hillside's lonely home,

Three-four days old, not setting soon,

I still don't know where love comes from.

if you altered the punctuation to this, i feel it would benefit the write:

Perhaps this nothing that I've got

Is everything that I deserve;

In vicious circles to be caught,

Sometimes even to lose my nerve.

I watch the candidate full moon

From my hillside's lonely home;

Three-four days old, not setting soon,

I still don't know where love comes from.

Interesting choice of word with 'candidate'; what was your specific reasoning, pelegrino? I'm hearing 'candy' and 'date', so link the moon with a sweet date, and even 'candid date' reflecting a sense of honesty in the thoughts being expressed by the N; i'd like to know if there's a particular reason behind 'candidate' as its inherent meaning? it fascinates me as a choice :D