by darkmaas
First, thank you for brightening my day with this lovely piece. Your poem has been mentioned on the new poems thread.
This is so hot, I'm wondering how the ice cubes survived long enough to be written about.
is just awesome. I could quibble about line breaks--I hate one word lines--but that would be mere fussiness. This is a really good poem. Take it elsewhere. Now.
a character in one of your poems or stories? I seem to recall the name. It's a very good poem. I'd make some edits, but I always want to edit.