All Comments on 'Love of Animals'

by sandyb

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Esperanza_HidalgoEsperanza_Hidalgoabout 13 years ago
sandyb

you always go for directness. IMHO, you could use more subtlety in some word choice (Butt--tits--fucked; need, breasts, loved), but overall, good work.

twelveoonetwelveooneabout 13 years ago
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yeh, but a good title for it, otherwise I would agree with es.

100

tigerjentigerjenabout 13 years ago

Very well done....love the directness and being straightforward ;)

vrosej10vrosej10about 13 years ago
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This is an excellent poem and getting a recommend. However I agree with Espie, the choice of words is wrong with the tone of this poem. I also have one other pick point; 'Galaxies whirled in their eyes' seemed off key with the concrete nature of this poem. Got 5 from me.

DeepGreenEyesDeepGreenEyesabout 13 years ago
Can see it...

I love your vignettes. Yeah, part of that is probably because I want to BE a character in many of them. I like the wildness of the imagery, and the place within it of the characters. Well done.

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