All Comments on 'Lust'

very well written and hits home like a sledge hammer, happens once it is too often, 5ed

It's a good piece on a sad reality.

Good. Coupla points. Wouldn't it be publically in the locker room - as opposed to the private bedroom.

Second verse weakened by one or two cliches?

Don't like 'the girl' in the first line - too impersonal. Mebbe give her a name, it might soften the readers image of her and make her hurt even more stark.

I like your stuff. Ignore my meanderings if you'd rather.5