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Thanks for sharing your poetry.

Carrie

This poem was mentioned in Wednesday's New Poems Reviews.

I’ll have to rewire my brain somehow now, because I can hear from my home a great sounding train (fortunately, little further away from) which I have always associated with romantic travels of yester days. Then comes this wonderful dark poem and ruins every thing for me! Well, at least for a while, and it was worth it!

Wait! I can hear the train right now! It’s 4:19; I am fine!

Jimi Hendrix song, 'hear my train a comin'. Well written, I think we've all heard our train a'comin at one stage in our lives .... just a matter of staying on the right track.

This reminds me of a good friend of mine, who fights suicidal impulse. There are some nice turns in here, and while there's clearly some rough spots, it works overall. Nice write.