All Comments on 'Madness'

aha, you're learning

3rd stanza EOL lullaby/dull/passed/ lull, take look at 6

field./ hand./grand./

keep this up

all in all, good choices for EOL

i see what you are trying here, good

Whispering windstormed fogged floor.

whisper of windstorm, fogged floor?

This clearly took a lot of work, and there are some really neat turns of phrase in it. Spider crawls out of my shoe! iiiick. It's hard to figure out exactly what is going on but that may be the point, since the title is Madnesss. I almost wish the title was alien abduction.

The punctuation is puzzling. I don't really know why you opted to put periods at the end of sentences, and inconsistently at that. And there are at least three instances where apostrophes seem to be missing (October's, dawn's morning's). In some places I think you need to put in commas too.

was all that true in olden days with dragons and wizards, TK U MLJ LV NV

Madness; check!

"Morphing limbs soon entered room.

Shape changed like focusing light"

It's all up Hill from......

I love the larger poems that are filled to the brim with vivid imagery as this one is. This poem brought a smile to my face and kept it there.