All Comments on 'merging'

This poem blew me away

and very rarely I can

say that.

The joing of two people

coming together as a single

entity. I loved it.

Fantastic Work!

Thank you.

~ J

I enjoyed the subject of the work. Some really nice movements here.

RE:

I lift my head and embrace your sharp glare

It burns through the haze

Of this bullshit world

And steps through my windows

Just my thoughts but I would cut the wordiness of this work. It fades with all the stop and go... and the extra rhetoric. I would use some puncturation also to stop the reader, make them pause and reflect on the merging message.

These are just my thoughts and my likes in poetry... but I do find a strength within this work that deserves a mention in the Sunday on Monday reviews.

thank you for the read~

Du Lac~