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LesseloovesPeterLesseloovesPeterover 10 years ago

Does this piece change POV or are there three people? Interesting rhyme choices.

LittleRedBearLittleRedBearover 10 years agoAuthor
POV

yes kind of i made the poem up at work and there were three of us guys and one girl and we would flirt a lot and we basically did as she asked of us and she mentioned she likes bondage when i asked about her sex life so i grabbed some rope and toyed with her and the rest is just fantasy to have her bound and have a soft way of exploiting her body as i find that more appealing than sexual torture at this point in my life

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Hmm.

It was alright, just needs some spelling and grammar correction. You should consider finding someone to edit for you.

LittleRedBearLittleRedBearover 10 years agoAuthor
thx

thk u i usually try to have the end to every other half sentence match the other end of the rest of its sentence

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Im about 6ft 3in tall, weigh aprox 310lbs(im chuby and like it that way), im very comfortable im my skin and mostly roam around shirtless and barefoot, I consider my self strong but timid and laidback, I believe that if im not myself then im a nobody so I express my personalit...